ArchMagus Orodalf
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Okay, so after several days of grinding and hitting my EXP cap (and, once, my Gold Cap), I have unlocked the Novus Finale.
It was disappointing.
There were aspects that I loved. The Celestra-The'Galin battle was a good challenge, and the art (especially Celestra's!) was terrific.
But there were also aspects to the story that I couldn't stand. Namely plot holes the size of Battleonia.
- Prior to playing through the quest, I also asked Celestra about her past. She told me that "We (she and her father) forged Weapons of Salvation." This is untrue. Garavin alone was behind the forging, which happened 20 years after Celestra left Lore.
- In the intro to the quest itself, Celestra says that "It has been over a thousand years since the Devourer The'Galin first arrived on Lore. My father put me into hiding while he tried to face the Uncreator and died for it." - False in several ways. The way this is phrased implies that The'Galin first arrived on Lore around 1000 years ago, at the time when Garavin was alive. He in fact arrived first 5000 years ago, and Celestra knows this. Furthermore, Garavin did not die when he tried to face the Devourer. He was, in fact, granted life eternal as the Eternal by this Devourer.
- Veritos says that "her [Rubia's] deepest memories would be of Haden, the world on which we were born." This is either a plot hole or a retcon, because Vogenvuld says in Haven's Gate that Vanatia was born on Lore: "I met her once. She's a Necromantress, born on Lore several decades ago. A Network agent named Epheel saw potential in her, and brought her and her brother to the stars."
- Where did this Memory Matrix come from? All right, it's not a plot hole, but it sure as Heck is a pointless Ass Pull. In fact, if you wanted to be witty, you could even call it a "removable discontinuity" because it barely played a role in the quest at all.
- I would almost call the teleportation stunt Deus Ex Machina. It was briefly mentioned in The Space Moglines that "You know, Gravlax has been experimenting with teleportation technology, though it's of a non-magical variety," but the fact that it was perfected to a degree to be used as precisely as it was and consuming as little energy as it was (the nonessential energy of the LSS Alteon was able to propel a God all the way to the other end of the Galaxy?) is a God out of a Machine (more like a God moved by a Machine, but that's irrelevant. :P).
- "The Elemental Lords of a new world are vulnerable, but only if unengaged in creation." Hmm. This means that Dark Madder had much more power than a Greater Power of Uncreation Who was her boss, because unless I'm very much mistaken, she smote them with a blast of Darkness that broke their circle and allowed her to steal the Engine in the first place.
- In the previous quest, "Sibling Rivalry," Temura Ge'Thrak says that the red thing with eyes "is a physical manifestation of the Devourer." There are three ways to interpret this. It could be a direct manifestation of The'Galin, in which case the mind controlling it and the forms chosen were The'Galin's. It could be an Avatar, in which case there is another mind involved. Or it could be a golem, in which case there is no mind, only a set of programs. It is most likely the second, as It was called such in the quest (Creation's End). The trouble with this is twofold. Firstly, an Avatar takes direct instructions from the God in control. The'Galin would almost certainly not want to kill or Uncreate Celestra because of how well she has fought his Network, which was precisely his intent. Secondly, if The'Galin absolutely wanted an Avatar to be in Lorian space for evaluation of the planet, he could do so either by moving the Avatar across the galaxy or manifesting another. Another trouble is that The'Galin's estimate of "40,000 years." According to the Huntress, The'Galin travels interdimensionally, between universes much in the way the Gauntlet allows her to do. This would not take 40,000 years. In fact, Celestra even calls what she does with the Gauntlet teleportation in Sibling Rivalry, which essentially means that this avatar of the Devourer could simply teleport back.
- The'Galin's intention is apparently "to uncreate the Engine of Creation." This does not work. Uncreating this Engine would Uncreate the parts of the universe originally created by use of the Engine, or the Engine would persist in some other form because of how integral it is to reality. Regardless, The'Galin is not to Uncreate everything, or even to consume elemental energies. He tests the worlds as was his position originally assigned by Lorithia, and Uncreating the Engine does this in no way whatsoever.
- You also have a loose end. Whatever happened to the Network? Why were they trying to capture Rubia, and why did they not continue to send their reinforcements to try to do so? (I mean after the quest, when Rubia presumably returned to do her ambassador duties on Novus.)
Constructively:
Some of these are easy to fix. You can make Celestra change her dialogue to note that something her father did was useful and that her father didn't die. You can change Vogenvuld's speech or Veritos's to either make the siblings born on Lore or on Haden. You can remove the Memory Matrix. You can explain, eventually, why and where the Network went.
Others are harder. I'm not quite so sure how you'll patch the other holes.
Gal, I hope you read this and consider re-writing the ending to the Novus Finale.
< Message edited by ArchMagus Orodalf -- 7/17/2011 3:31:41 >
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