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6/25/2008 18:10:01   
.Discipline
Member

Hi peepz.

I thought I would post all of my pre-April stuff in this thread for you guys to read when you want some nostalgia about your most handsome poet.

No! Not Amboo! What the heck?

Enjoy and comment. Or else!

http://forums2.battleon.com/f/tm.asp?m=14059759

< Message edited by .Discipline -- 6/26/2008 14:17:55 >


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6/25/2008 21:10:25   
Firefly
Lore-ian


Link?

Anyways, rawk on, Dizzy. Love your poetry! *resolves to steal Dizzy's talent get better*

Oh, and don't forget about my edits for Poet's Tree. =P
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6/27/2008 15:50:02   
Amboo
October 2008 Poet of the Month...Woot!


Mehehehe, thanks for that. As Firefly says, Rawk on Dizzy.
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6/29/2008 8:54:12   
Crimzon5
Member

Hi! Umm... a late congratz for being the April PoTM

Anyways...

The last lines in the 3 stanzas of Contagious were genius!:

quote:

Let blood be spilt today.
Let blood be burned away.
Let blood be drained of red.


Also, I really like the variety of your poems and how creative they are. Liquid Darkness (two random words put together). heh, to be honest, the poems of mine which I consider good are chess-concepted.

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8/4/2008 17:03:43   
Lux
Member
 

quote:

Contagious

The body dies in vain,
Mind withering away,
Contagious condition,
Destroyer of nations,
Let blood be spilt today.
Good. I can't improve upon it...

Condition spreads faster,
Killing more than any army,
Ammunition is not found,
Coughing bodies hit the ground,
Let blood be burned away.
Same as before. Just...flowing.

Pathetic attempts to survive,
Reach out to the fields of dead,
But too late as the weapon strikes,
The only vestige of human life,
Let blood be drained of red.
Sad...but nice.


I give it a 10 out of 10. It flows wonderfully, but is sad...however, it's still good poetry.

< Message edited by Opacus -- 8/4/2008 17:05:03 >
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8/6/2008 14:09:24   
Fenrir Wolfsoul
Member

Your poetry haunts my soul...As good as people have told me I am until I can write like that I'll never truly believe it myself

10 out of 10 bar none its great

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Yes, I know where he is, and if you'll notice they're all written from basically the same perspective:
Up high, three seconds before I pull the trigger on my sniper rifle...
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9/28/2008 9:35:11   
Red_Fusion
Banned Multi


very creepy...but good. 10/10. The last stanza was a little weird and sad.

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11/10/2008 6:32:00   
Fornever
Member

In the poem 'Alchemy', you misspell 'their' as 'thier'.

Little typos there. But seriously, all of your works are amazing. I've tried poetry myself and it didn't work out quite as well as I thought it would. I give them all 10 out of 10. Beautifully written, you most definitely deserve your title.

Oh yes, I think you posted Banging the Drums of Apocalypse twice.

< Message edited by Dragon1225 -- 11/10/2008 6:46:44 >
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3/1/2009 12:00:01   
Lilyheart Butterflies
Member

Fornever is right!

Before Firefly and after of both "Banging the Drums of Apocolypse".

LOVELY poetry.

Hey, like the others have said, nice ending to the one that I think Crimzon5 posted to.


< Message edited by Mistress Lilyheart -- 3/1/2009 12:01:17 >


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5/18/2009 17:28:06   
  Ai No Miko
Moderator


I've only skimmed through a few pieces, but the first stanza of Firefly was my favorite so far.
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5/18/2009 18:02:55   
.Discipline
Member

Well, thanks for reading, everybody! It's good to know that my older poetry still inspires people. I really should write some new stuff for Legends and Lore soon. The whole thing is starting to get cobwebs and I shouldn't let it.

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9/14/2009 15:17:57   
.Silence
Member

Question all and Incomplete are very good. Don't be afraid to not rhyme. It always ends up coming out so well.
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1/8/2012 9:44:01   
Helixi
Member

You should start writing poetry again; it always turns out so well. :D
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10/4/2012 18:09:37   
Aurauris
Member

My, what a delectable feast of word and verse you've laid before us, Discipline! I think it was right around "Puppet" that I realized why I was so charmed with your work: the vivid imagery, short-and-sweet stanzas, and almost whimsical rhythm bring to mind a darker rendition of Shel Silverstein's children's poems, which I loved in elementary school and still adore to no end.

Lovelovelove the chill-inducing imagery and theme of renewal through death in "As the Flame". Assuredly my favorite of your works.

"Ode to an ArchKnight" still has me giggling out loud. I'm reminded heavily of an incident involving a certain ArchKnight falling beneath accusation regarding tendencies of.. *Coughs politely* gastronomical distress.
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