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Silversword8 -> Poetry~The Words in My Book-Poetry from the Mind [Comments and Critisism] (9/22/2008 20:42:55)

Here is the link to my poetry.

I'm a freshly approved poet and I hope you will enjoy my poems. Well comment away and what-not!



Firefly -> RE: Poetry~ a Few of My Poems [Comments and Critisism] (9/22/2008 21:03:38)

I really liked Washer Work. Very amusing, and whether you intended it or not, I found it slightly satirical.

The Winter Song was also good. I liked the flow.

Hmm, all I really have to suggest is maybe more punctuation. In Washer Work, I wasn't very sure about where to pause in places.

Hope to see more from you. ;) And remember to explore lots of topics and structures. Happy poetry writing. ^_^



SL -> RE: Poetry~ a Few of My Poems [Comments and Critisism] (9/22/2008 21:14:42)

Like Firefly, I enjoyed Winter Song. The flow was excellent. And, my only suggestions are, more punctuation, and not rhyming just so it can rhyme. If you know what I mean. Otherwise though, good writing. Keep up the good work. ^^



Silversword8 -> RE: Poetry~ a Few of My Poems [Comments and Critisism] (9/22/2008 21:20:59)

[:D]~On it! Glad you liked them and I'm glad to be an approved poet now!



Silversword8 -> RE: Poetry~ a Few of My Poems [Comments and Critisism] (9/22/2008 21:53:36)

I added a new poem called Flavors of the World. I tried a whack at un-rhyming poems for a change. Well enjoy and I hope the topic is taken well as I tried to make an analogy with the whole thing. Enjoy!



pollme -> RE: Poetry~ a Few of My Poems [Comments and Critisism] (11/2/2008 17:53:07)

Winter Song is Beautiful. The flow is so calm, I used to hate winter, until today,(though there is no snow,) I come home read this and love winter even more. Beautiful. Flavors of the World is short, sweet, and something we can all learn from. You are amazing, truly amazing!

P.S.
Tell me when your poems are published!



Silversword8 -> RE: Poetry~ a Few of My Poems [Comments and Critisism] (11/2/2008 19:47:56)

Thank you![:)] I'll be making more, some deeper than others. Some I write for the sake of loving to write poems, others I write because of my emotion..Halloween poem coming soon!



pollme -> RE: Poetry~ a Few of My Poems [Comments and Critisism] (11/2/2008 20:04:08)

Great! I laughed the whole time!
All these Poems people write are amazing! I came to this section and started reading and everyone is so good!
Of Course It helps on a AE website, go AE! And Go Silver!
I just think this is so fun, reading poems! I can't wait for more!



Silversword8 -> RE: Poetry~ a Few of My Poems [Comments and Critisism] (11/3/2008 15:21:15)

More will come soon, most likely different stlye, it's nice to try new things.



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