[Quest] (DF) Ruin's Quest Chain: Comments

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Acient J -> [Quest] (DF) Ruin's Quest Chain: Comments (3/13/2011 9:05:38)
Ruin's Quest Chain

Mordred -> RE: [Quest] (DF) Ruin's Quest Chain: Comments (3/13/2011 22:28:42)
You made a typo in Sek Duat's name the first time you mention him. :P I like this, but the dialogue seems really flat and lack-luster to me. It feels like: "Hey, go do this, and come back."; "Oh, you're back. Now do this for me."; "I;ve been on your side the whole time. Forgive me!" It seems really one-sided on the character's part, and Ruin isn't very dynamic either. Those're my thoughts on this.

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