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kingzeth221 -> (AQ) Glory Days (3/4/2012 16:23:35)

Here is the link http://forums2.battleon.com/f/fb.asp?m=20135297 so that you may read it and give commentary. And i will be adding more fights to the book, thats just the first of many.

Also tell me who you would like to see in a fight. You can give me one creatue or two. I will have to use them sooner or later.




Glais -> RE: (AQ) Glory Days (3/4/2012 16:34:27)

That...was a bit strange.

Anyhow, noticed a big run on sentence near the middle.

Also, will there be an actual plot, or just random fights?
I mean, you could build a decent story off of it if there were some actual characters in a tournament or something.




kingzeth221 -> RE: (AQ) Glory Days (3/4/2012 16:37:52)

Well thats why i posted, so i could learn. And I'm not sure yet about a plot or not, I'm still thinking about that. And thanks for the feedback.




Glais -> RE: (AQ) Glory Days (3/4/2012 16:44:43)

Oh sorry, I only meant the fight was odd...FireZard vs Moglin and all.

But yeah, no problem as far as feedback goes. I enjoy reading so...yeah.




kingzeth221 -> RE: (AQ) Glory Days (3/4/2012 16:49:51)

I understand how it could be a bit odd, but see thats what i was originally going for was just random fights. Just for entertainment and so people would be able to see who i think would win in a fight.




Dwelling Dragonlord -> RE: (AQ) Glory Days (3/4/2012 17:00:31)

This feels very RPG-like, is it supposed to read like that?

I'd suggest you experiment with some more interesting opponents next. Hardly anyone would be wondering who would win a fight between a moglin and a firezard, although I must admit I had expected to see the moglin heal him/herself.




kingzeth221 -> RE: (AQ) Glory Days (3/4/2012 17:03:58)

Yeah i probley should have made the moglin heal themself. That would have made it longer and more interesting.




kingzeth221 -> RE: (AQ) Glory Days (3/4/2012 19:08:03)

Ok guys, i updated the book and added a second fight. Hope this one is more interesting and funner to read. Also dont forget you can make suggestions on what monsters you want to see fight.




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