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Chaosweaver Amon -> RE: The Estari Gateway Discussion thread (12/6/2012 10:41:46)

Well, we don't know if all of them are, just Sepulchure. And Amon is a god in a human body, I could change his class or something, and I have thought of a twist about the mysterious stranger. And new chapter style: Yes? No?



Dwelling Dragonlord -> RE: The Estari Gateway Discussion thread (12/7/2012 3:49:01)

@Chaosweaver Amon: We know at least two DoomKnights were generals of the Shadowscythe.

I have no personal preference for either chapter-style, though from what I understand some may find the style you experimented with confusing.



Chaosweaver Amon -> RE: The Estari Gateway Discussion thread (12/7/2012 12:49:16)

Two doomknights? Sepulchure and...? And I thought the new chapter style would be simpler, and to stop me having to think of chapter names.



Dwelling Dragonlord -> RE: The Estari Gateway Discussion thread (12/8/2012 7:02:35)

We don't actually know the name of that DoomKnight, we merely find his corpse at the ancient battlefield during the Earth Orb Saga.



Chaosweaver Amon -> RE: The Estari Gateway Discussion thread (12/8/2012 11:31:19)

I don't recall that...anyway, new chapter up, edited all the chapter titles, and typos that I could find. Hope you guys enjoy...



Chaosweaver Amon -> RE: The Estari Gateway Discussion thread (12/11/2012 13:17:03)

You know, I've been thinking, and I think this should be moved to creative prose. Because I can't stay canon to Dragonfable, without changing the main character's back story DRAMATICALLY. If an AK could move it there it would be much appreciated.

Anyway, could I get some comments and criticism on the most recent two chapters? I'd like to fix any errors that I've missed.



Glais -> RE: The Estari Gateway Discussion thread (12/11/2012 16:28:14)

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Because I can't stay canon to Dragonfable, without changing the main character's back story DRAMATICALLY.

The main character could always just not be DF's protagonist.

That's what me and many others do for their characters' backstories.



Chaosweaver Amon -> RE: The Estari Gateway Discussion thread (12/13/2012 14:06:13)

Well, since nobody bothered to give me characters besides Legendium...-.- I've decided to enter AQWorlds two newest NPCs in along with Tobias Legendium, and other characters I've created. next chapter coming, five new characters...be ready...



Glais -> RE: The Estari Gateway Discussion thread (12/13/2012 23:00:35)

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I've decided to enter AQWorlds two newest NPCs

Wait, how would they fit the plot at all?



Chaosweaver Amon -> RE: The Estari Gateway Discussion thread (12/13/2012 23:17:08)

Eh, I figured since DF is not canon to AQW, and I needed names, I might as well use a bit of AE's own material...Three are from AQW, one is of my own making, and one is created by our very own, Legendium...



Chaosweaver Amon -> RE: The Estari Gateway Discussion thread (12/15/2012 15:32:08)

New chapter is up, I brought three of the five in, hope you enjoyed, it may be a bit tricky to work your mind around the accents, so be careful.



Chaosweaver Amon -> RE: The Estari Gateway Discussion thread (12/16/2012 13:50:18)

Ok now another chapter is up, I still need somebody to critique the last few chapters.

(EDIT:The blade of Grimlon's sword is meant to look like Sepulchure's, not the full sword, just the blade, only more steel-ish.)



Dwelling Dragonlord -> RE: The Estari Gateway Discussion thread (12/17/2012 12:11:40)

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"As it happens," Achrion smiled. "Veck is not your true brother, he may be of your blood, but he is not your brother. You see, there is no real person called 'Jack Slugwrath' You are more than you think."

May I ask why Achrion smiled at this point?

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He saw many short, stout people, who roared, and laughed and drank, who smashed through rocks they were mining with axes.

pickaxes

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The elves, with their keen senses, pride equal to the dwarves, to quick for their enemies to see them coming.

too

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"Bloodwine, apprentice..." he rasped.

That sounds more like a job for a lesser subject.



Chaosweaver Amon -> RE: The Estari Gateway Discussion thread (12/17/2012 12:52:44)

Smiled...hmmm I guess I just wrote that for some sort of spacing between lines...I'll fix those typos and the reason Grimlon is the one to fetch the wine, is because when Amon is in his "Trance" He only permits Grimlon in the room. Because, as you will learn later in the story, Amon's human form cannot always take the strain of it.



Glais -> RE: The Estari Gateway Discussion thread (12/18/2012 14:39:32)

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"You are the Estari Gateway, with the strengths, and weaknesses of the three most powerful races on Lore."

Huh.
As well, wasn't Lore created by Lorithia? And how is Amon the god of Death when we have well, Death.
I can see what you mean by conflicting with DF history now though ~_^ I'd thought you just meant with the protagonist initially.
Can't say I'm too keen on this master race idea.
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If we want to get out of here, we gotta look to them like we deserve the punishment.

Doesn't that make it less likely for them to get out instead of more?



Chaosweaver Amon -> RE: The Estari Gateway Discussion thread (12/18/2012 19:10:52)

@ Glaisaurus not exactly, you'll see what happens to those prisoners.

@legendium I apologize if you are in any way humiliated by the fact that you were arrested for stealing sheep. (I mean to add a twist to that.)

Well, now we basically know who the protagonists are, and the main plot. For those of you who are somewhat confused about 'How do you have a god of death when there's death, what about the elemental avatars?' Blah, blah, blah. Well, the Estari are sort of the "Head Gods" The CEOs, then there are lesser gods, like Amon, and Aldreni, who are also very powerful, but not quite as much as the Estari.

I would appreciate any more comments, what you guys think overall of the story, is it going too fast, too slow, is the plot too basic (which you might want to wait a few more chapters before claiming that) So on and so forth. I am considering what to write the next chapter about still...



VolosTheNuetral -> RE: The Estari Gateway Discussion thread (12/21/2012 0:25:57)

Its a great story. It had me hooked from the beggining to the end. It shed light on all the characters thus far. I loved it, and I want more. Your writing is a drug, and I am an addict.



Legendium -> RE: The Estari Gateway Discussion thread (12/21/2012 5:13:54)

@Amon

Not in the least. I can't say I wasn't surprised, but I knew there would be changes necessary to fit your story. It's just a name in this story, not the original character I made.



Chaosweaver Amon -> RE: The Estari Gateway Discussion thread (12/24/2012 22:04:30)

Sorry the next chapter hasn't been posted yet! I am suffering from a horrible ailment called WRITER'S BLOCK. Yes. That's right, I'm stuck. I can't tell you when I'll have it up, could be tomorrow, could be in two weeks, I can't say. Just didn't want you guys to think that I've abandoned it, still would like any criticism on it.



Chaosweaver Amon -> RE: The Estari Gateway Discussion thread (12/28/2012 11:22:55)

Well, while I am still stuck, I need your opinion on something. Do you guys pronounce Amon's name 'Ae-mun'? Or 'Ah-mon'? In the meantime, check out the story that VolostheNuetral and I are Co-writing! http://forums2.battleon.com/f/tm.asp?m=20956994&mpage=1&key=�

Though, it is post-DF, and Pre-AQW so it WILL contain spoilers from the Estari Gateway.



Chaosweaver Amon -> RE: The Estari Gateway Discussion thread (1/3/2013 18:19:34)

Well, I am working on the next chapter, it shouldn't take more than a half hour, hope you enjoy!!!

New chapter is FINISHED!!! Jack and Achrion have traveled to Falconreach, in search of passage to Swordhaven, though strange events have been occurring, and the road ahead does not look promising...



Chaosweaver Amon -> RE: The Estari Gateway Discussion thread (1/4/2013 17:46:42)

I'm only posting this so it is noticeable, and some of you will pay attention, to comment on it!!!



Dwelling Dragonlord -> RE: The Estari Gateway Discussion thread (1/6/2013 7:01:26)

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It is said, that it is one of the remains, of the ancient world.

I would say that you do not need any commas here.

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A league of human mages, who consider it their 'duty' to control any Magi's use of magic.

A sort of Rose?

I do not believe that you explained to the readers that Jack and Achrion had travelled to a point past the cabin, which I personally assumed to be in Oaklore Forest. You make it sound as if Jack never came upon Falconreach or Verteroche before reaching the Elemental Foothills.



Chaosweaver Amon -> RE: The Estari Gateway Discussion thread (1/6/2013 10:16:46)

Well, where The Rose try to 'Cut Off' Magic, this Order simply tries to limit it, so nobody rises up to take control. So they are good, in a sense, but they have flaws as well, you'll probably see them later on.

Well, they went down the Oaklore cliff instead of going east, across. Through where Amon broke from his pearl. I was going to have something happen with that. They go along the western coast, heading south, then head northeast. It's a bit complex, but I just mean to have them find some things, or run into some people, etc.



Chaosweaver Amon -> RE: The Estari Gateway Discussion thread (1/9/2013 17:20:33)

Well, I've had an idea, if you guys want, I can try to post a new chapter every week-two weeks? Because when I had my writers block...it SUCKED! But, I am chock full of new ideas, but I don't want to spend them all in one short period of time. Comment with what you think.



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