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Razen -> RE: =AQ= Clash in the West War Stories commentary (6/8/2014 19:33:28)

Well, Part 2 of my War story is up.

@Kors:
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Popin paused to let the healer He held out his free hand and sent a wave of healing mana into Popin’s body.
Your first sentence didn't come to an end here.

@Sir Nicholas: It is a nice start, but I think that there might be some discrepancies as far as chronology between events goes since you seem to have based it more on the release dates.

@deather98: Since you said that she is demon/dragon, I can't resist. In their tongue, she is... Dovahkiin!

@battlemaster25: Your story is indeed starting to get interesting.



deather98 -> RE: =AQ= Clash in the West War Stories commentary (6/8/2014 19:34:45)

lol razen its just her orginal description for tyranna remember? ah I see, its the horns though... they look so much like krenos horns..hmm..


I think I'll leave it the way it is just to give a bit of interest to the journal :3



Razen -> RE: =AQ= Clash in the West War Stories commentary (6/8/2014 19:36:05)

Her original description was that she was the child of a greater demon and a sphinx, no?



Sir Nicholas -> RE: =AQ= Clash in the West War Stories commentary (6/9/2014 2:35:15)

Here is my story. It's a bit shorter than the previous ones I've done, but I'm trying to add more characterization.

I have also made chapter one. Prepare for a heated father-son-discussion and reconciliation, followed by some military strategy. Be aware, I've taken some liberties with the numbers of forces on both sides.



dragon_monster -> RE: =AQ= Clash in the West War Stories commentary (6/9/2014 14:59:47)

http://forums2.battleon.com/f/tm.asp?m=21697426&mpage=1&key=� a little peak on my characters opinion on this war.



battlemaster25 -> RE: =AQ= Clash in the West War Stories commentary (6/9/2014 16:50:21)

Chapter III, The Finale, has been posted. This story ended up being much more somber than I had originally planned.



deather98 -> RE: =AQ= Clash in the West War Stories commentary (6/9/2014 16:59:53)

Wow battle That was very good. And Im guessing the reason she wasnt revived was due to her alliance to necros made death mad?



kors -> RE: =AQ= Clash in the West War Stories commentary (6/11/2014 1:39:44)

So I guess my story was correct in a few aspects! Like in my story there were far more Demon knights fighting than Frogzard knights, Deren was more interested in investigating, and more than a little mutual distrust of the other in their alliance.

And I'm working on it again. Got distracted by new games, and then lost my place in the war counts too... Oh well, back to the grind and putting words to paper.



UnderSoul -> RE: =AQ= Clash in the West War Stories commentary (6/11/2014 1:50:20)

My war story will be started soon. I just need a few more details in my head.



Sir Nicholas -> RE: =AQ= Clash in the West War Stories commentary (6/11/2014 2:02:29)

This has proven to be a most fortunate prolonging of this war. Now it means I can add a little more spice to it, especially with the dynamics between my two main characters.

I'll begin working on Chapter 2 immediately.



battlemaster25 -> RE: =AQ= Clash in the West War Stories commentary (6/11/2014 2:10:16)

What is this? A second story? This one is (obviously) going for a rather different tone. Also, purple.

I have far too much time on my hands.



Razen -> RE: =AQ= Clash in the West War Stories commentary (6/11/2014 4:22:14)

@battlemaster25: Nie's tale was indeed gloomy. The Crowsister story seems less interesting to me so far really.

@Sir Nicholas: The emotion is real for Nathan and Nicholas. I would say that you may wish to give the second part with the war conference a check again for errors and typos.

Part 3 of Ingmar's tale will be up soon. Opinions and comments of course would be welcome.

Edit: Part 3 is now finished. It can be found here.



Dwelling Dragonlord -> RE: =AQ= Clash in the West War Stories commentary (6/11/2014 12:21:08)

@battlemaster25: I think you captured the horror of the War of the West quite well in your story with how the young 'Emoran Knight met her end.

@Sir Nicholas: A good emotional story, though I think with the recent turn of events certainly not the end of the hardships for father and son.

@Razen: In your story you mention Sir Ingmar calling upon the powers of the Elemental Lords to bless his sword. Wasn't this the final move of the Frogzard Knights?

Also, in the second last paragraph it would seem that the time which is used is off.



battlemaster25 -> RE: =AQ= Clash in the West War Stories commentary (6/11/2014 13:37:26)

Second part of the second story. Here, we have a major cameo by another forumite, a weird kinda fight scene thing, and evidence that our protagonist has emotions after all.

Also, Razen, while I understand what you mean about the first chapter being less interesting, I assure you that I do have a plan. I ask that you see where it goes before writing it off.



UnderSoul -> RE: =AQ= Clash in the West War Stories commentary (6/11/2014 14:00:06)

Started my War Story! It starts just before the war hits, so it feels kind of weird writing it considering where we currently are. I'll add to it later.



popinloopy -> RE: =AQ= Clash in the West War Stories commentary (6/11/2014 15:17:37)

I'm waiting for some other stories to advance before I can continue my own. I plan to intertwine a few more stories than just kors' and my own. I'm just waiting for a good opportunity to join them.



UnderSoul -> RE: =AQ= Clash in the West War Stories commentary (6/11/2014 16:42:58)

Added a massive thing of pretty much all dialogue. It just sets up the next couple of parts.



Razen -> RE: =AQ= Clash in the West War Stories commentary (6/11/2014 21:10:59)

@DDL: In the description for Evil's Bane, it also is referred to as a blessing of the Elemental Lords, is it not? I was relying on an unofficial wiki though as I have not the armor on my person nor is there a 'Pedia entry for it.

@battlemaster25: I meant that the character Crowsister and her premise seems less interesting which may seem odd. Not to "write it off" as you put it. It just piques my interest less than the mystery that surrounded Nie.

I also see that I need to catch up on the stories once more. If only my internet was more...stable and I was not such a beast of slumber.



popinloopy -> RE: =AQ= Clash in the West War Stories commentary (6/11/2014 23:30:37)

Chapter two is out. Nothing eventful. Near the end, I tried to blend in battlemaster's story, and it wasn't the best transition. Oh well. Me tired, no can write gud.



UnderSoul -> RE: =AQ= Clash in the West War Stories commentary (6/12/2014 17:17:24)

Added a third part! Lord Scorpio actually does something resembling a fight!



popinloopy -> RE: =AQ= Clash in the West War Stories commentary (6/12/2014 21:05:26)

I thought Lord Scorpio wouldn't have fallen for such tricks. If he's fought some of the other forumites before, he should be used to these tricks.



UnderSoul -> RE: =AQ= Clash in the West War Stories commentary (6/12/2014 22:01:14)

@popinloopy Hey, everybody slips up sometimes.



Razen -> RE: =AQ= Clash in the West War Stories commentary (7/6/2014 4:05:25)

Heh, this is rather late, but I did finish my war story finally. Eye of the Storm is complete, and Ingmar's tale is done for the time being.



popinloopy -> RE: =AQ= Clash in the West War Stories commentary (7/6/2014 20:06:36)

I'm just waiting for a burst of creativity and motivation before I continue mine. Might take a while...



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