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...Is it just me, or is there something very ironic about the title of your thread? =P
I swear I didn't plan on reading this, but I couldn't stop myself from kicking the tab. That. Was. Hilarious. The part that made me burst out laughing was this:
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Or perhaps it was the fact that when the sun hit his skin, baby kittens appeared all around him.
I couldn't stop laughing here, lol. Puppies might also work. ;)
That was really witty, really funny, and I especially liked the ending. And this vampire is actually more my type of vampire than Twilight, lol. I mean, at least he's murderous and covered in blood. =P I also like how you touched up on "This is a short story! No time!" and "Moar drama pwease!"
Since I'm not a humour specialist (at all), the only things I managed to pick out are a few wrong presses of the enter key. Here:
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And right at this moment, Elizabeth S. was wishing that a boy would show up. And not just any boy, either- a boy who wasn't completely human! Because, for some reason, boys that were only pure human did not interest her, no matter what their personality was or what they looked like. And for some reason that she could not quite fathom, two wishes of her weren't granted at one time: the boy of her dreams showed up, and the class become far more interesting at the same time.
A boy crashed through the window, wielding a sword in one hand. And somehow, she just knew
he wasn't human- there were a few subtle clues. Perhaps it was the way his eyes seemed to turn bright red and shoot out laserbeams. Perhaps it was the long, blood dripping fangs that he had. Perhaps it was because he was more beautiful than any human could ever possibly hope to be (whatever that means...). Or perhaps it was the fact that when the sun hit his skin, baby kittens appeared all around him.
And this:
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“I'm not going to let a monster like you date my friend Elizabeth!” The vampire groaned as he heard this, and walked back to the car.
“What did she want?” asked Elizabeth as soon as the vampire got back in the car. He slammed down the gas pedal before he replied.
As funny as it is, you also touched up on some issues that are actually quite bitter. So while it was humourous, for me, it was also bittersweet and reflects something about the world we authors live in. This line really makes one think far beyond the page:
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“The target audience won't like me unless they think I'm a good girl who wants to take it slow, but you can be as bad as you want and they'll still love you.”
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