Kinzdor
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Ohh a new story! I should give you a gold star just for doing this! (I said like a 1st grade teacher) I love the concept, can`t wait to see how this unfolds. The intro seems interesting, now to read the rest. I loved the banter between the two in the study, the scene where the spell was cast was ingenues and very well written. The scene with MO was very quaint and emotional. Seems good so far, like I said love the concept. Onto part 2 I like how you portrayed Demo and the situan in the park, though I can sorta see where she would lose followers with that tude of hers. Looks like our cyborg pal shares a power with The Dealer eh? Onto part 3. Very good story so far. Hope you continue you it. As for how my chars would react to a world ran by villeins, well Darkness, 2.0, WD,and BA would go with The Dealer, Stargate would probelly just write the planet off as worthless and leave, the A team would have been ran out or defeated, and I`m not sure but the agents.
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