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Amboo -> Ambooetry - Poetry by amboo [NEW: - As the wind blows] (6/26/2008 16:42:56)

These are the best of all the poem that I have wrote.

Please tell me what you think of them.

Ambooetry

Achievements

Nominated for Poet of the month March

Nominated for Poet of the month April

Nominated for poet of the month May

Nominated for Poet of the month June

Nominated for Poet of the month September/October

Won PoTM October

Goals

Get nominated for Poet of the month again

Win Poet of the Month

Get 3 Archknights to comment on my poetry... Again [8D]

Get a comment on my poetry from Falerin

Get 5 Fanboys/Fangirls





Clyde -> RE: Ambooetry - Poetry by amboo (6/26/2008 16:50:05)

Don't worry about that goal (Win Poet of Month) Amboo because it'll happen soon, I just know it. :P

Also is this just your currently chosen poetry or all of it because I remember you had more? Don't get me wrong they're good, just can't find my favorite one.




~Shade~ -> RE: Ambooetry - Poetry by amboo (6/26/2008 16:54:23)

*points to sig*




Amboo -> RE: Ambooetry - Poetry by amboo (6/26/2008 20:34:50)

These are the ones I chose to put up, my best ones. If you PM with what your favorite was about I can put it up. Thanks Sithishade.




Crimzon5 -> RE: Ambooetry - Poetry by amboo (6/29/2008 8:44:01)

The Diary really got me there...

Memories... heh; got a lot of bad ones. Actually the main reason I don't have one (actually, it's because I'm too lazy xD). But IF I had one, I think that poem would best describe it.

quote:

AUTUMN STROLL- Haiku

Under amber boughs
ephemeral glimpses of life
fall before my eyes.

1- un; 2-der; 3-am; 4-ber; 5-boughs; 6-e;7 -phe; 8-me; 9-ral; 10-glimp; 11-ses; 12-of; 13-life; 14-fall; 15-be; 16-fore; 17-my; 18- eyes

That's one excess there, fella.
e·phem·er·al

But it's really good. Though my teacher has shown me a lot of Haikus about seasons (well, they usually are about nature) ;)




Amboo -> RE: Ambooetry - Poetry by amboo (6/29/2008 9:10:20)

Actually it was the "Glimpses" that got me on that one. When I looked it over, I had only counted glimpses as one syllable. I'll correct it.




Amboo -> RE: Ambooetry - Poetry by amboo (8/7/2008 21:25:33)

New, The first time.




Firefly -> RE: Ambooetry - Poetry by amboo [NEW: - The First Time] (8/7/2008 21:56:57)

I better read this, eh?

quote:

with the first kiss on the cheek.

A bit... informal? Maybe "upon" will work better?

quote:

What is it about you,
that makes me feel this way.

Period should be a question mark.

Aww, how sweet, Amboo. I can't critique this properly, lol. Flows too well. =P

I should write more WAFF*-y stuff like you. Instead of making my readers cry all the time. =P

*warm and fuzzy feeling




Amboo -> RE: Ambooetry - Poetry by amboo [NEW: - The First Time] (8/7/2008 22:12:51)

I'm going to stick with "With".

I corrected the question mark.

Thank you [:)]




Amboo -> RE: Ambooetry - Poetry by amboo [NEW: - The First Time] (9/21/2008 17:29:18)

New poem. As the wind blows.




Coyote -> RE: Ambooetry - Poetry by amboo [NEW: - The First Time] (9/21/2008 18:12:40)

I liked the nature imagery through it. But what I didn't get was how all of this peaceful nature stuff ties in with how much you love her. Perhaps, you are saying that love is a natural thing, something from the very primordial pits of our hearts. Something that wells up from deep within us, something that we can trace back to our ancestry and even back beyond that as apes in Africa, where love began and stayed with us as some primal Force of Nature, still influencing our decisions through the roots that we have as a part of Nature.

But I babble.

I cannot also help but notice that the lines are broken up in groups of four per stanza. The number four, associated with the Circle of Life, the four seasons, the four elements-- It's coming right back to nature again. With this sense of wholeness and unity with the Forces of Nature, it goes right back to what I was babbling about earlier. On top of that, a blowing wind is archetypal of change coming. Combined with the groups of four (Circle of Life, the four seasons), it signifies that something changes. However, Nature itself is archetypal of something unchanging, of something primal that will always be with us no matter how far we advance. This juxtaposition helps bring the message of the primordial love to the present. No matter how all these things around us change, love will still be eternal. I like that.

"As the sun light hits the flowers". (That "sun light" should only be one word, by the by.) The sun, symbolic of enlightenment. The flowers, once again a force of nature. It's a force of life, something bountiful and plentiful and beautiful. Even in this technological age, there is something natural and beautiful: Love.

"as the Rain drops gently fall." Raindrops (once again, only a single word) It's sunny, but it's raining. Perhaps this is a "light from the heavens" effect with the clouds, where a break in the rainclouds allows a few gentle rays to fall upon the dark landscape. Perhaps, it is more juxtaposition as the rain signifies dank, wet darkness, but the sun signifies warm, dry... Well, warmth. But, what I believe, is that this is merely a gentle drizzle-- but more important than the rain is the water. Water, /the/ chief symbol of the unconscious. Of the primordial backgrounds we have. Well-played, Amboo.

Jumping ahead a few stanzas, as anything else I hammer will be merely redundantly restating what I've already stated...
"as the bees buzz in there hive. " "There" should be "Their", silly Amboo. =P

In short, this poem is a series of juxtapositions between change and stability, of the primal Forces of Nature and the thought-provoking Forces of Man. And in doing so, you strengthen the image that love is natural, but unlike the poor rain forests we take so much joy in killing, it will be with us, always.




Amboo -> RE: Ambooetry - Poetry by amboo [NEW: - The First Time] (9/21/2008 18:23:15)

Thanks for that Versy, you read deeper into it than I did. I just intended on the love is natural and beautiful, concept. But you have got me thinking.

Fixed the errors.




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