From rainbow to space ~ comments

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Elnaith -> From rainbow to space ~ comments (7/27/2008 19:00:17)
This thread is for both the one-act play script (Finished) and the story (Unfinished) The script is no real spoiler for the story, since it will end differently (should I ever finish it >.>)

pollme -> RE: From rainbow to space ~ comments (11/2/2008 19:23:16)
Well first of all let me say that the script is very enjoyable!(I have not read the book though plan to soon!) I would say this is a good base, but needs to be added on to. A love scene with John and Imke would be tremendous and more of an introduction. A scene on how John gets away from George would be great and also a scene on how George gets contact information would go nice too! I feel like John should not die so soon, maybe get married to Imke. And maybe a explanation on why John believes him so easily maybe he could meet him somewhere. I also think music could fit in nicely! Oh, one more thing! quote: (Linda Enters, she looks at John and smiles.) mke: (Motioning to the bench) Is deze plaats bezet? Who is Linda and you had a typo! Thank You for writing a beautiful script.

Lilyheart Butterflies -> RE: From rainbow to space ~ comments (2/25/2009 15:02:13)
Beautiful story, simply beautiful.

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