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Cow Face -> RE: Pouring Out My Heart- Comments Thread (2/2/2009 15:25:31)
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I told you that I planned on reading your poetry over the weekend, and I did. Now, praise my tenacity! Joking, of course; it was a pleasure to read it.
As I have told a few other people, I do not feel that I am good at critiquing free-style poetry. After all, there is no "correct" way to write it (or any poetry, really, but some have set standards). Other than a little proof-reading, I really couldn't find anything wrong with your poetry. The flow was a little choppy at times, but that could be just me. Your writings, however, were very interesting. They often had deep, stirring messages, and you have fresh, new ways of looking at things, such as Untitled. Also, at least to me, you are good for someone who has only written poetry for two-and-a-half months. When I started for two-and-a-half months, I was absolutely terrible. You are most certainly not. Keep writing; you can only become better.
Oh, and it was a lot of fun writing that collaboration with you! =)
Proof-reading:
Untitled
quote:
Some people call it
"That one", "That poem",
"Untitled".
Most punctuation marks, such as commas and periods, go inside quotation marks and apostrophes. Note, though, that this is not the case with semicolons and (I believe) a few other punctuation marks.
quote:
But it needs a name.
So it just hangs it's head.
The possessive form of "it" is "its." "It's" means "it is."
Maybe I'll feel something
quote:
While my victims laugh at me,
Taunt me; I am bird in a cage.
For poetry, this might be okay, but you might have meant "a bird in a cage."
Buried
quote:
But maybe you won't be found.
You might be stuck
In a living hell forever
Hell is sometimes capitalized. Leaving it lowercase isn't wrong, just something to consider.
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