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Shreder -> RE: A Heart's Words--C&C Thread (10/21/2010 0:34:15)
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It seems you've gone a long while without a comment--let's rectify that. :P
I really liked "Stealing", it generally flowed well and I loved the imagery you used--it really strengthened the poem. I do, however, have a few small suggestions:
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When no ones home?
This line would be more grammatically correct if you changed it to either "When no one is home?" or "When nobody's home".
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Not black or white.
Perhaps "Neither black nor white" would be more correct?
Anyways, overall I thought it was quite good.
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