15cman -> RE: It's a coup...let. C&C. (7/11/2009 23:37:37)
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I did realize that mix and tick don't entirely rhyme, but I couldn't quite get anything else though.Ah well.I might think of something later and edit it. quote:
I especially like the latest one. The only suggestion I would have to make is to remove the second or in the second line, to make things flow better. would I say I was charming, or dreadful, full of prose? It does make in flow better, in a manner of speaking.But it doesn't quite make sense to me.Without that last "or" it seems like I just put the words full of prose there just so I could rhyme. Thanks for the C&C, guys.On my way to wherever, then.Hey, I just got an idea for a couplet!lol, see you guys really do help more than just with C&C!
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