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Fleur Du Mal -> Serpent of Eiji (7/12/2009 16:46:50)

Serpent of Eiji

Index of posted chapters so far
Prologue
Chapter 1 - The Golden Arrow
Chapter 2 - The Newcomer



Genre: Fantasy. Not exactly a fanfic although the looks of one of the characters is based on the appearance of my character in WarpForce. I will add a picture later, when the story has progressed far enough for it not to be a spoiler.

Setting/tech status/background:

- Guns, swords, bows, gaslight, no electricity (as commodity, hey, there will be thunder =P). Haven't decided on steam power yet. Ongoing technology creep: superficial knowledge of technology spreading throughout the land. Knowledge on how but not on why.

- Prevailing ideology: human dominion over other species as the norm. This is further enhanced by the technology.

- Names characters and places drawn both from East and West, fantasy and "RL." Mixture of mythologies of East and medieval West regarding to dragons.


Description: An experimental story. a) Trying to break some (not all) fantasy archetypes. b) Practising writing in different POVs that are realtively constraint as opposed to omniscient and that are meant to sound at least somewhat distinct.

Elaboration on a)
- dragon: The dragon(s) in the story do(es) not the fit straight into the typical "Western" dragon -model. (Not saying that it would fit straight into the "Eastern" model, either. ) However, most of the people in the world where this story is placed in, classifies the dragon as the typical "Western" dragon.

Elaboration on b)
The amount of description and the style each chapter is written with depends on the POV. If the person, who's POV the chapter or scene is written in, doesn't notice the colour of the wall-paper, then it is not described. If the person gets agitated, there should be a change in the sentence lengths. If the person's mind tends to wander, the text may wander.

- Prologue
POV: Mona.
-Chapter 1
POV: The dragon. Long thoughts, long sentences, flowing.
-Chapter 2
POV: Lars. Observing, lists out the things he observes. His sentences get notably choppier when excited.

More details filled as the story progresses and more characters are introduced through their own POVs.


Disclaimer: Due to the rules of this forum, the content will be PG-13, however, the story will be pretty brutal at times. Nothing is described explicitly, I'll be mostly leaning on allusions, and innuendos, but that does not guarantee that you can not be distressed by some of the events described in the story, regardless of your age. Read at your own risk.



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Fleur Du Mal -> RE: Serpent of Eiji (7/12/2009 16:50:17)

Prologue

“Where is Lars?”

Mona woke up with a start to the question. Several sheets of paper and the pen that had pressed against her cheek while she had slept, her head resting on the writing desk, tumbled on the floor. The following click of metal hitting the floor and the faint shuffling stole away her focus for a moment and she lost the direction of the voice. She squinted her eyes in the daylight that poured unhindered over the desk and into her eyes. She saw no one, only wooden boards and dark shadows in the corners of her room.

“Where is Lars?”

Jerking to the sound she turned left and saw a shotgun emerging from the shadows. The intruder hid herself, offering Mona only a view of the steady aim of her hands. Eyes widened, she stared at the demanding barrel. She opened her mouth but not a word came out.

Still blurry after the sleep, her mind fought to deny any of this was real. The sunlight hammered hot on her forehead, little droplets of sweat soaked her greying eyebrows and fell on the chestnut desk. A mockingbird sang in the distance. The shotgun kept on staring at her, she at it and the two, dark-tanned hands that never trembled. The hands of a killer.

“If Lars isn't at home, I don't know where he is,” she finally whispered. Her mind whirled and an image of downstairs rose before her eyes, her husband's favourite chair empty. She swallowed hard. Where is he? she thought, realising only now that she must be alone. If he was home, that intruder would be long dead.

Silence fell to the room. Mona peered into the shadows, trying catch a glimpse of her, a chance to measure her should an opportunity to fight back arise. She prayed that the person would be better defined by her soft voice than those hands holding the weapon. For a moment, she thought she caught the glimmer of her eyes in the dark, but discarded the thought quickly. Too bright, too inhuman.

“You really do not know...” the intruder said after a while. Her tone of voice didn't seem to expect an answer and Mona chose not to repeat herself. Again the silence of the shadows measured the silence of the sunlight.

“I have been hunting him for too long. Always he escapes,” she continued. The barrel waved for a moment in response of her breathing in deep. Mona listened, still hoping for a chance to see her, a chance to open the drawer on her right, a chance to grab the pistol in it and take aim...

“I think I will turn the tables now, make him hunt me instead.”

The words pierced Mona's thoughts, the intention behind them cleared. Suddenly, she felt terribly cold. What is this? Who is she? Why...Lars? She looked at the shotgun and tried to reason with the stranger,

“If you shoot me with that, the whole village hears. You'll be dead in an hour.”

She didn't answer with words, but lowered the weapon, balancing it with her left hand. Her right hand vanished into the shadows.

A cloud floated in front of the sun. Stripped from the shadows the intruder stepped forward.

All Mona saw were her eyes. Cold marble. No black pupils. No brown irises. No movement, no emotion.

Is she blind? Mona threw everything to that one card and ran. Half-way on her sprint through the room she saw a flash of silver, then a red line drawn on the wall with invisible hands, then nothing.




Fleur Du Mal -> RE: Serpent of Eiji (7/20/2009 0:24:23)

Chapter 1 – The Golden Arrow

The flight of the golden arrow against the darkening skies: the only memory he could count on. Time and grief had already begun their work on blurring the details, and his dreams had started to add some of their own. Each morning he woke up a little more unsure. Could he really remember the number of emerging stars on the eastern horizon or if the great mountain of Eskeleth had already received the first snow? How could he assume anything about such unimportant details when he didn't even know if his mother was already dead as he crawled to her side, his eyes as watery as the river side meadow she lay on?

The last pieces of charred wood stared at him from the hearth. Curled up to a tiny ball of soft scales, the dragon blinked and stared defiantly back at them. Deep behind his eyes kindled a fire of his own. The image of the fireplace and the worn rug spread in front of it vanished before him as his thoughts returned to the arrow, his mind fixed to it as it flew faster and faster through time, its tip splitting air and water, its unforgiving arc aimed and destined in the heart of his mother.

Inside of him raged frustration, bred by the inability to grasp what had brought this violent change to his life, what had changed the humans from the occasional sole wanderer, who cooled his feet in the river on hot days or lay gazing at the moon on clear nights, to this mob of murderers that had blocked their river with a dam and ambushed his mother.

Outside, lightning divided sky, followed by the deep roar of thunder that heralded the coming of the first Winter storm. The sound reminded him of his lost home, of the long stream feeding off the glaciers of Eskeleth, and the music the beat of rain on the river surface created. As the first drops hit the window he remembered something else: his mother, alive, dancing in the river, her serpentine body fluid and flowing like the sweet water that embraced them both.

Like that she had been in his eyes before the arrow plunged through her scales, and the water foamed bloody and white in the death battle. Big, rusty hooks had followed the arrow, shot from steel monsters, ropes attached to them. Pulled by horses the hooks drew his mother out from the waters, while the enchanted arrowhead kept diving deeper into her heart. They left her to die and dry on the tainted grass, shelterless under the sun that would soon made her body rot and fester.

What was he to do but cry?

Squeaking on its hinges, the house door opened and let in the true volume of the pouring rain. Peering into the doorway, the dragon saw Ama hanging up her cloak to dry. His mother had told him her name already a year earlier, when they watched the old woman gathering colourful leaves from the river bank. She said she respected her as a wise human. She never explained to him why, but that one encounter in the past made him trust her when she found him half-dead beside the remains of his mother. He let her carry him away, tucked in her woollen sweater.

The dragon curled up tighter, trying to fortify himself inside his memories with his mother. Yet his ears followed every sound: the shuffling of fabric, the moving around of light objects on the table, the familiar sulfuric scratch, all this wrapped in the smell of lamp oil. He heard her closing the door, thus muffling the sound of rain.

Footsteps approached from the door, went past him, and ended by the fireplace with a heavy thud and clattering of dry wood. He felt the warm blaze of the fire grow in intensity, like it were kissing his eyelids. For a moment, he pondered if he disliked it or not, but forgot about it as soon as Ama stood up again and walked to the stove. Growing hungry, the dragon listened to the water boiling until his stomach started grumbling in loud protest, burying all other sounds and scaring him to open his eyes.

“How are you doing tonight?” His host sat right in front of him, holding a cup of tea, squinting her jade-coloured eyes, wrinkles peeking from the corners. The dragon stared back in amber, breathing in the jasmine.

“I'm sorry, I haven't had a guest quite like you before. Are you well enough to eat now? Do you eat fruit? I have peaches,” she said, offering him one.

With a still lingering reservation, the dragon reached out for the fruit with his impressive row of sharp teeth. As soon as the delicious pulp touched his tongue, caution left him and he swallowed it in one piece, seed included. Uncertain of how to ask for more he resumed staring at her. Bursting out a radiant smile, she pulled out a whole dozen of them from a bag she had hidden behind her back. Then, she sat by him on the rug, drinking her tea and watching the peaches disappear one by one.

After he had finished eating, the dragon curled himself back to a tiny ball, turning his sad gaze to the window, and his back to the fire and the old woman. The rain continued and the memories flooded back to the surface. For a while, she gently stroked his neck with warm hands and whispered, “I know, I know.”

Just before the dragon succumbed to sleep, he heard her mumbling to herself, “He needs a name.... Oh dear, all these years and still no wiser...what have I gotten into...”




Fleur Du Mal -> RE: Serpent of Eiji (9/8/2009 12:09:57)

Chapter 2 – The Newcomer


Lars halted midway, just before pulling himself up on the last branch. Right before him, the attic window gaped wide open. The evening light was growing dim fast as he balanced himself high in the old maple tree and peered into the little room.

It stood half empty, a desk in front, a rug with faded colours on the floor, and a narrow bed looming lonely at the back, untouched and a cotton nightgown spread on it. She is not here, he thought, taking a better hold of the tree trunk while he started to scan all the other windows as well.

Downstairs, an oil lamp illuminated the kitchen. For awhile, Lars watched Mrs Arden preparing for dinner, her hands wielding a knife in a determined tempo. Three onions turned into a pile of slices and flew into a pot of stew. A hungry growl from his stomach reminded him that he hadn't eaten dinner yet.

While he observed her, the freezing winter wind rose to play with the branches of the tree and his straw-blond hair. Sharp shapes of bare twigs swooned around him as he pushed his curls behind his ears. Below, the last leaves of autumn rose in the air and begin to dance around the tree.

Then a spark of fire called for his attention. In the room beside the kitchen stood Mr Arden, holding the candle he had just lit. The used match died out and he let in drop while placing the candle into a holder. His other hand dove into the shadows, drawing an arch before returning back to the small circle of light, tightly grasping a doll.

Lars watched as the man pressed the toy against his chest. Broad satin ribbons, blacker than the despair and the loss they declared, tied the doll's hair in braids. Silently, Lars continued to observe the man in his grief until he dropped to his knees and wailed, hiding his face against the long skirts of the doll. Only then did he turn his head back at the room in the attic. Only then he saw that the door to the room was barred from the inside with a wooden chair.

She has climbed out the window using this route, scaling this tree, he thought. Quickly, he descended, the rough bark scraping his palms and tearing the knees of his trousers. A rush of blood warmed his cheeks and neck as he tried to figure out which way to go. This visit to satisfy his curiosity, this wish to see the foreign girl the Ardens had adopted after the loss of their young daughter had turned into something significantly more exciting he had thought. A tracking mission.

Swiping the ground around the tree with his eyes, Lars used the knowledge he had been taught so far by his father during his seventeen years of age. The likely routes people chose when they didn't want to be seen. How the depth of footprints varied according to the person's weight.

His heart beat steadily, his breathing calmed. He wiped his mind clean by imagining the grey wolf he had encountered in the mountains last spring. He tracked it for days until he had shot it down with one arrow. His first big kill. Sweaty palms. The taste of blood in his mouth. Copper and cold iron.

A depression in the sand a few feet away, leading away from the center of the village. Lars squinted his eyes, their blue taking a darker hue, and set off after the newcomer.



The moon was yet to rise. Surrounded by darkness, Lars cast his eyes to the sky and cursed the stars. What are you good for, you weaklings? Shining up there, your noses full of brightness and giving me none. Go back to the sea to entertain the wretched sailors, I have no use for you...

The stars continued their steady watch on him while he stood halted in the middle of a steep climb. Sweat ran down his back, seeping through his shirt. Nothing moved, nothing except his heaving chest as he waited for the newcomer to continue walking.

Counting the seconds it took for his breathing to settle down, he wondered how much truth the talks of the villagers held. That she had alien blood in her. That her mother had been a witch. That she had bewitched Mrs Arden in her time of mourning, luring her to take her in while Mr Arden was still too succumbed to his grief to object.

No doubt most of the outrageous rumours were contributed to the reservedness toward outsiders, against diversions from what was dictated by custom, tradition, and Ordenance. All often punished by exclusion. Lars knew the cost of deviation himself: the weight of the hours he had spent in his room, forcing his right hand to act instead of his left had taught him that.

Yet now, climbing up the hill, she moved way too fast for a regular village girl. Instinctively choosing her path through the rocks and devious vines that wriggled their way over the crust, she reminded him of a deer, a mountain lion. A wild animal.

First, he had followed her easily enough. For a good mile, she had trod the path to the hills that huddled the northern edges of the village, passing flocks of sleepy sheep on the one side and pieces of cast-away construction material on the other side.

Lars was certain he had identified her standing at the point where the road turned from gravel to plain rock. Who else could the unfamiliar girl have been, wrapped in loose grey cloak that billowed around her in the wind? Then she suddenly turned left, away from the path. Swift as a shadow, she had started climbing alongside one of the creeks that had carved its course into the hill side.

He couldn't figure out where she was heading, why she climbed this arduous route in the dark. While she had still been following the road, he thought she had business with the old herbalist who lived north of the village. But now, balancing between the boulders, he abandoned all his expectations, gave up trying to predict the unpredictable and focused only on the cue for her to move again

And there it was, the whoosh of clothes in the rising wind, the low rustle of small stones against rock, all moving towards the lake nested in a valley behind the hills. He shot after her as quickly as he could without risking too much noise.

Soon, roots started to slow him down. Biting his lower lip, he heard her gaining distance as more and more trees emerged all around him, weaving their arrays of roots on the ground. He stopped to support his weight against the lone tree that had just tried to trip him over. For a moment, he shifted his feet around, searching for a clear ground in the miss-mash of vegetation creeping over dead rock. A nighthawk screeched above him, its shape a mere wisp of ink flying against the sky. It spotted its prey and dove. He found his footing and continued his prowl.

Ten minutes later, the Well of Stars spread before him: a deep pool of water, glimmering at the foot of the mountains that quickly cascaded into the majestic form of Eskeleth.

Lars crouched to scan the area in the feeble light. He saw nothing but the transient ripples the wind crafted on the lake surface. Rather by knowledge than by observation, he pictured the mountain looming above him in the north and the half-dead tree trunks standing in cohorts to the south, behind him. Somewhere to his left he smelled a blooming chrysanthemum. He straightened himself and walked towards it.

After a couple of dozens of steps, his feet got tangled into a soft bundle of wool. In vain he tried to regain his balance by grasping whatever his hands could reach. His fingers brushed against the chrysanthemum, and he fell to the ground with a cloud of petals that dotted him in soft yellow. Blushing for his own clumsiness, he sat up and shook his head for a moment, sending the petals flying. Then, his eyes locked on the fabrics around his legs.

Carefully, he untangled his feet, pulling the wool onto his lap. The material felt so soft and warm against his palms that he automatically brought it to his face, breathing in deep. The smell of ginger and hibiscus filled his nostrils, warming his blood faster than he could realize it was her cloak he held. Stumbling up, he dropped the material as if it burnt him now.

The melody of water dripping into water made him turn and direct his gaze back on the Well of Stars.

From the east rose a swelling moon bathed in colours of carnage, its light licking the watery surface. The beams of glowing crimson bared a lone figure, sitting on an equally lone stone in the middle of the lake, shirt and trousers glued on her body and rivulets of painted water running down from her boots.

She stared straight at him.

He watched her hair flow as a curly mess framing her cheeks with glossy black. Her lips curled into a predatory smile.

He was caught and paralysed under her green eyes. He forgot to breathe. His arteries pulsed harder with each thud of his heart until he turned deaf to all sounds except the pulse of his own blood.

The water still dripped when he turned and ran, her laughter echoing unheard behind his back.


Scene three will be edited in here...




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