Unknown Soldier - Comments Thread

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Willkill12 -> Unknown Soldier - Comments Thread (12/9/2009 15:05:44)
Comments for my story for Unknown Soldier, located here:

ringulreith -> RE: Unknown Soldier - Comments Thread (12/9/2009 20:15:06)
Hmm. I like it. My only advice is to try adding more commas to the story. I won't quote where, that'd be too long. But read the story out loud. You'll know when to add a comma. Otherwise, pretty good. You have a good descriptive style. I like it.

Willkill12 -> RE: Unknown Soldier - Comments Thread (12/10/2009 16:49:02)
Thanks, I'll be sure to do that ;)

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