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draketh99 -> A Hero's Story? (6/27/2011 16:51:57)

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Discussion thread for mah current DF fanfic. please critique :D



Mritha -> RE: A Hero's Story? (6/27/2011 17:06:40)

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Struggling to regain his senses after being denied his goal, he looked around to realize that we was surrounded by skeletons.

Should be "he"

What you have so far is good both in storyline and in writing style. The informal talking of the guardians is something not often seen despite capturing the character on a deeper level. I myself often forget to use that :)

Keep up the good work draketh!



draketh99 -> RE: A Hero's Story? (6/27/2011 17:30:14)

Thanks :D especially for the typos fix, those tend to creep up on me <.<



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