RE: Herosmash Unhappy times discussion

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delta blitz -> RE: Herosmash Unhappy times discussion (10/14/2011 12:05:24)
@star: don't worry my friend I know how you feel, personally I want daily comments for my daily updates but I can't have that so I find a way to work around it. It doesn't mean your a bad writer it just means the others are busy. As for your 16th chapter I must say it was good, clearly you knew about the guns the characters were using and you gave them a good personality to boot. Can't wait to see what happens next. I claim this page for the sake of all story writers.........commence commenting.

star screamer -> RE: Herosmash Unhappy times discussion (10/14/2011 18:30:33)
If you were wondering Bob is a zombie, Jack is a pumpkin head monster and bane is a were wolf

Goldstein -> RE: Herosmash Unhappy times discussion (10/14/2011 18:35:51)
Just so you know, it's GoldENstein. I'm Goldstein.

Assassin01 -> RE: Herosmash Unhappy times discussion (10/15/2011 20:02:38)
This might be a bit late but I really enjoyed reading this....I got good mental images while i was reading....i like the story line and characters...only problem i had is why did some villains need guns if the have powers? lol(Mr. Blaque i can understand)...but other than that, if u keep writing i'll keep reading.

star screamer -> RE: Herosmash Unhappy times discussion (10/15/2011 20:21:03)
The ones in chapter 16 I think had no powers asides from Darcron, but he did not use guns

Assassin01 -> RE: Herosmash Unhappy times discussion (10/15/2011 21:19:27)
Oh ok my bad...but still a really cool comic. New Chapter was funny at the end....but Unity working with star now....i like it, seems like an interesting twist.

star screamer -> RE: Herosmash Unhappy times discussion (10/23/2011 22:09:47)
@ assassin1 Yes great twist! Info on next chapter: It will be released into bits because I am planning on making it extra large. and I am thinking that I should change the parts into the chapters and get rid of the little chapters entirely, I will be waiting for an opinion.

1fire1fire1f -> RE: Herosmash Unhappy times discussion (10/28/2011 1:06:24)
What hapend to me......

UnityDestroyer -> RE: Herosmash Unhappy times discussion (10/28/2011 1:11:25)
@star screamer Why can't you edit a post to make the next chapter? It will slow how you improve. Look at mine, I don't edit the posts because if you look at it it's long enough not seperated with using enter making it look like a poem.

star screamer -> RE: Herosmash Unhappy times discussion (10/30/2011 10:00:46)
Don't expect more from the story until awhile, I am planning something BIG!

star screamer -> RE: Herosmash Unhappy times discussion (11/4/2011 23:56:54)
New part to chapter soon.

star screamer -> RE: Herosmash Unhappy times discussion (11/11/2011 17:21:53)
No one has to comment anymore, story is gone. Not that it was deleted, just it seems like people are ignoring it, sorry to those who enjoyed it.

Goldstein -> RE: Herosmash Unhappy times discussion (11/14/2011 19:28:42)
Well, I'm sorry to see the story go, but may I make a helpful suggestion? Your story was so fast-paced and frenetic, to translate it to a TV show, it's be a series of images each appearing for a few seconds, then replaced by a new one. Take it at a slower pace. Flesh out characters, describe them and the settings, and put spaces between each new paragraph. Don't tell, show. Instead of saying that the monster was big, say instead that it took up the whole room. Maybe you could revise your current story, or start a new one?

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