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Eukara Vox -> =DF= In the Beginning... Commentary (9/22/2011 10:54:36)

In the Beginning...
A place just for DF peeps to talk about their character beginning stories!




Dwelling Dragonlord -> RE: =DF= In the Beginning... Commentary (4/30/2014 5:46:03)

@Darius:

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After beginning at DragonsGrasp, one of his instructors was familiar with his bloodline, and filled in the blanks that his surrogate parents either left out intentionally, or of which they were themsevles ignorant.

themselves

The question on my mind is how did they know about his bloodline. I mean, how did they even know his surname? Wasn't he abandoned as a baby?
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Try as he might, though, his Dragon Amulet wouldn't link him to any of the whelplings in the nusrery aboard the flying fortress.

hatchlings, nursery
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and the stunning Eladrin priestess in tow
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Rolith tried to console the hero over the sad status of his parents, but he completely ignored the subject, and instead asked Rolith what he knew about a Grey Elf priestess atop a red dragon, who was carrying a black box that reacted to his Dragon Amulet.

What gave you the impression that Lady Celestia was an Eladrin or Grey Elf? I too believe that she isn't human, but I don't see an elf in her.

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Implored to give chase immediately, the hero set out to the eastern side of Oaklore Forest, where he came upon the priestess being accosted by several bandits, seemingly led by an odd thug that bore the name Slugwrath, and was wielding a DragonLord's Loss.

Drakath actually uses the Marquis Sword. (Which would make sense seeing his background.)
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Giving chase to the box-obsessed goblin would prove less than fruitless, however, if he didn't seek aid from a local Ranger, located just past the bustling city of Falconreach in verdant Surewould Forest, situated on the far western outskirts of Greenguard.

Actually, Greenguard lies to the south of Darkovia. Surewould is part of Maguswood.
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(and how he'd even managed to recall that insignificant detail he cannot fathom, even to this day.)

manage
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The last of the Oaklore guardsmen, Sir Pent, stood sentinel at the precipice of the Hydra River bridge, making safe all thoroughfare traffic bewteen the militarized fortress of Oaklore, and the commercial metropolis of Falconreach.
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With that out of the way, he entered the high-walled city-state of Falconreach.

Does this mean your backstory begins after the many reconstructions of Falconreach? Also, during Book 1 and 2 Falconreach was ruled by King Alteon.



Darius -> RE: =DF= In the Beginning... Commentary (5/2/2014 14:49:12)

Thanks for catching those typos, I can be slightly dyslexic at times. I'm not officially diagnosed or anything, in fact quite the contrary, I've always been an exceptional speller. I'm just a fast typist, and often miss such things when making long posts. Furthermore, it was past 1 AM when I typed all that up, ergo, I was in a sleepy state of mind at the time. Still, it's not a bad story for being written while tired, hm? :3

I got the impression that Celestia was a Grey Elf simply because of her immortality and her hair. There's nothing saying she isn't a Grey Elf/Eladrin/Feychild either, so I figured, why not add that flavor text? If it truly isn't canon, I can always go back and edit it out.

I was not aware of the Marquis Sword and Maguswood details, thank you for pointing them out. I will remove those errors in my story right away.

Yes, I use the current Book 1 intro, the current state of Falconreach's construction, and many more modern details when telling my story. I'm following my own script, not DF's release history, so the Wrath of Xan war, Nythera ticking off the Avatars, etc, aren't part of it, even tho I've played those releases as they were live with the character I'm writing about. If that runs contrary to the way most people write their origin stories, war stories, etc., then I'm sorry you disagree with my methods, but it's just how I prefer to tell my tales.

Edit: "Managed" is grammatically correct, as it's a past-tense statement, not present-tense. As for what his adopted parents could possibly know of his origins, that's a story for another time. My intent was to be vague about what they knew, and if that confuses you, I'm sorry.



Dwelling Dragonlord -> RE: =DF= In the Beginning... Commentary (5/2/2014 15:21:43)

@Darius: Should people wish for their backstory to remain vague on purpose that is completely fine by me.* But you do know the reasons for it yourself, right? That is all I really want to know. That YOU know why it is such and so.


*After all, I employ the same methods for my own backstory.



Darius -> RE: =DF= In the Beginning... Commentary (5/6/2014 14:23:47)

All it is is that my character is a wannabe demi-god (the son of a Creatioux void dragon and the Avatar of Light's eldest daughter) who has yet to grow into his powers, and with everyone making their characters into gods, angels, or demons these days, he's nothing special compared to everyone else. I didn't want to add that bit because it makes me sound conceited and self-righteous, and I hate when people boast like that, so I avoid doing it myself when I can.



SugarPixelz -> RE: =DF= In the Beginning... Commentary (5/10/2014 15:37:00)

I don't really have a story for my character. Well I kinda do, but it's a bit complicated.

My character is based off of my character that I use for D&D...


But all of the stories I've seen so far are great!



Dwelling Dragonlord -> RE: =DF= In the Beginning... Commentary (7/15/2014 14:49:57)

@HikariNoRyuu: I think you have written a wonderful story, but as you have pointed out yourself already there are some things different. As such my commentary will be about your own canon.

In fact, the only thing which wouldn't work even if this is your head-canon is the following. (Not the when and why, but how.)

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As a result, Edelia the school of Soulweaving, was forced to relocate underground, giving the impression that it had been disbanded.

From what we have seen in-game, and I presume this will be the same, Edelia and the nearby village of Mortem are protected by a barrier made out of soulthreads only Weavers can cross. There wouldn't be a need to go underground as they are figuratively speaking already out of the public's eye.



HikariNoRyuu -> RE: =DF= In the Beginning... Commentary (7/15/2014 15:18:18)

@Dwelling Dragonlord: Ah, I forgot about that bit. Thanks!



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