megakyle777 -> RE: (HS) THE DEATH GAMES! (1/12/2012 4:17:42)
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Hi there, just wanted to give some critisism on the stories of the Ommicorp Death Games from what I has seen so far. I will make it short. Kinz, the prolouge is good, but I think it needs to be run through a spell checker for puntuation and spelling purposes. The tale it tells is good though and quite interesting. My only complaint is that the reveal of Clown to the audience may be a little too early, but I will wait and see what others think on that. It also may be a little short, but since it's a prolouge that's fine and it serves it's purpose. Also, link is broken here. Goldstien, I liked your tale and it adds some intrigue to the games already. Good job. I wonder how far this imposter will go...
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