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Dwelling Dragonlord -> RE: (Pre-DF) Blood streams on the streets (1/22/2012 9:30:27)
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Have I seen him before? Even if I was, his scrawny face with faded blond hair covering his eyes didn't seem familiar to me.
Had, had
Alteon has brown hair from what I saw in-game.
I will not lie to you, there is a lot of incorrect grammar in there.
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He didn't said anything against it to me face-to-face, but I fear he plans to kill or even torture me from this deed. I wasn't first one...Tom, who also left from guardian position, have been strangely disappeared. No one haven't seen him after quitting from his position. I fear the worst and I fear same happens with me too. So I run off from capital in hope to find more time to live as a free man with hands and legs strongly attached to my body.... At first I didn't knew where to go, but then I remembered you, good friend from past. That's why I started to come to you... At first I searched you from Moonridge, where you were last time, but there I heard that you had already left. But then I remembered that you talked about some old wooden shabby town with very few houses, that hardly stay up very against the strong northern shore winds. Town, where you bored. Town called Raven..or Eaglereach or something like that...Anyway I found my way to here and here you are..But why are you on streets?? What happened with your parents' house??..."
didn't say, for, the first one, has strangely, has, the same will happen to me, ran, know, my good friend from the past, came, in, The town where you were born(?). The town was called Raven ... Eaglereach or something like that ...
To comment on the last sentence I corrected. Alteon now knows the name obviously, he found his way to Falconreach did he not?
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When you didn't found a place to stay in your hometown then I, stranger don't have even change to find one.."
When you can't even find a place to stay in your own hometown, then how am I as a stranger supposed to find one?
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Friends, who hadn't seen each other in a long time talked all-night-long. Alteon spoke about his heroic deeds and harsh journey to me. I envied him because of his interesting brave adventures. I spoke about not so interesting economy problems and about me having hard time to find clients to my merchandises. But at the same time, when we were distracted by our dialog, someone was lurking in Falconreach. Someone sneaky and deadly. But we didn't knew about it at the time. We only heard time-to-time branch crackings and rustle from bushes near of us. We thought that it was only wind. But it wasn't. It was a farewell gift from our beloved king, Slugwrath....
For the first sentence, are you talking about friends in general or specifically you and Alteon?
for the bravery he showed on his interesting adventures.
for/to sell, dialogue, know, branches cracking
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