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Mortarion -> Tales of the Tower of Remembrance, discussion (2/16/2012 19:36:52)

The Tower Of Remembrance

Hello guys, this will be my thread for my new, short or large, stories that I will be making about my own world.

SO I will explain a few things: The "Tower" of Remembrance is more like a spire that contains a mini=world, because the actual world has become a barren wasteland, people live inside the spire not knowing that there is a barren wasteland outside. This "Tower" Was built using both bio technology and magic, but there are few cities left with technologies, this are called Mechanic CIties,they are filled with machine, and machine suits called Dramon wich can take either a person, or a soul, in the first case the person need to have a power source to work on the Dramon, on the second case the soul works as cntroller and power source, but it is constantly tortured and is used for punishment. I will expand this more latter



Glais -> RE: Tales of the Tower of Remembrance, discussion (2/16/2012 23:01:00)

Have to admit, the tower bit itself sounds very interesting. Not sure how I like the Dramons though...I wonder, if they cause so much pain, why do the people use them. I expect that's a plot point though

As there's nothing here yet, can't say much else, but I will give it a read when you have something up..



Mritha -> RE: Tales of the Tower of Remembrance, discussion (2/17/2012 19:37:39)

Please provide a link to your story in your first post.



Glais -> RE: Tales of the Tower of Remembrance, discussion (2/17/2012 19:57:33)

^:From what I can tell this is a placeholder of sorts. The actual story doesn't seem to exist yet.



Helixi -> RE: Tales of the Tower of Remembrance, discussion (2/18/2012 5:39:50)

Thread unlocked. Comment away. ~Helixi




Glais -> RE: Tales of the Tower of Remembrance, discussion (2/29/2012 23:10:22)

Alrighty then mayne. Read the premise. Seems decent, alien war results in damaged Earth. Aliens joining up eventually was cool though.

Only thing I really noticed were a few typos and that you didn't capitalize the alien species' name.

Anyhow, as with just about all L&Ls, I should be keeping up on this, good luck in your future writing..s.



Mortarion -> RE: Tales of the Tower of Remembrance, discussion (2/29/2012 23:19:29)

Thanks, and well I was in a borowed computer wich didn't had word



Helixi -> RE: Tales of the Tower of Remembrance, discussion (3/19/2012 4:57:25)

As before, I would suggest running your work through Word a few times before posting it. I think this premise looks interesting and I hope you update soon.



Mortarion -> RE: Tales of the Tower of Remembrance, discussion (3/19/2012 5:23:07)

Thanks Helixi, and now I have a word checker built in my internet explorer, so that shoudn't be a problem. Now there should be an update soon if I can



stromy -> RE: Tales of the Tower of Remembrance, discussion (3/19/2012 12:31:46)

I would recommend writing it in a word processor and then transferring it over. After you clean it up, I'll give it a look.



Mortarion -> RE: Tales of the Tower of Remembrance, discussion (4/5/2012 17:34:05)

SO here is a new chapter of my Dosier of the Tower of Remembrance hope it's good and that it's according to the rules



Glais -> RE: Tales of the Tower of Remembrance, discussion (4/5/2012 18:08:31)

That was a bit shorter than I expected, but it sets up Gladiators which will seem to be very important.

The whole system reminds me a lot of Bionicle's final story about the Glatorian.



Mortarion -> RE: Tales of the Tower of Remembrance, discussion (4/5/2012 18:36:10)

Guess my mind worked on it's own will :P. Did I follow every rule?



Glais -> RE: Tales of the Tower of Remembrance, discussion (4/5/2012 18:38:15)

Yeah there were a lot less grammar/spelling mistakes this time far as I can tell.



Mortarion -> RE: Tales of the Tower of Remembrance, discussion (4/5/2012 18:43:55)

Ok, but I meant if I didn't break any content rule



Glais -> RE: Tales of the Tower of Remembrance, discussion (4/5/2012 18:46:10)

Content rules I think are somewhat loose. As long as you're not sexually explicit, using a ton of cussing, or overkilling the gore you should be fine.
By overkill I mean going into extreme detail on it.



Mortarion -> RE: Tales of the Tower of Remembrance, discussion (4/5/2012 18:48:17)

ok, was worried with the whole thing of the Gladiator's blood being addictive



Mortarion -> RE: Tales of the Tower of Remembrance, discussion (4/21/2012 21:20:35)

Small update, check the dossiers, you might find something intresting now [;)]



Glais -> RE: Tales of the Tower of Remembrance, discussion (4/22/2012 0:15:58)

Reminded of the Glatorian even more xP Similar concepts and all.



Mortarion -> RE: Tales of the Tower of Remembrance, discussion (4/22/2012 0:19:34)

lol, did it in a sub-concious way, and hte first quote?



Glais -> RE: Tales of the Tower of Remembrance, discussion (4/22/2012 0:24:29)

Missed the first one. Hm, tower of Babel eh? Interesting goals.



Mortarion -> RE: Tales of the Tower of Remembrance, discussion (4/22/2012 0:26:29)

Well it wasa reference, it meant that it was a great as the tower of Babel



Mortarion -> RE: Tales of the Tower of Remembrance, discussion (5/23/2012 23:19:14)

tempted to make a stand-alone storie



Glais -> RE: Tales of the Tower of Remembrance, discussion (5/24/2012 1:27:50)

But then...don't you have two others that are not yet complete? Piling a lot onto your plate.



Mortarion -> RE: Tales of the Tower of Remembrance, discussion (5/26/2012 0:08:38)

I know, but, hey there are worst people out there, like nield who has 5



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