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lordkaho -> Essence of Murder- An Episode in London C&C (3/22/2012 1:49:18)

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It's been a while since I've done any real writing so here's my second attempt on a short story taking place in the Rinkernatorverse.

It's somewhat based on real events, but like I said only 'somewhat'. I'll be doing some short twists here and there.

Comments and criticism are very much appreciated.

Discuss away!

~LK




Glais -> RE: Essence of Murder- An Episode in London C&C (3/22/2012 2:33:15)

Drat, ended on a plot twist xP

When I read Jack the Ripper, all I could think of is TVtropes constantly saying VAMPIRE JACK THE RIPPER in relation to JJBA.
Whether that will turn out to be true here remains to be seen. There do seem to be Vampires about...



lordkaho -> RE: Essence of Murder- An Episode in London C&C (3/22/2012 3:22:22)

Plot twist? Where? I haven't even started yet lol. Anyway, don't worry there won't be any vampires here. One of the two is rather vampiric though.



Glais -> RE: Essence of Murder- An Episode in London C&C (3/22/2012 3:24:40)

Sorry, I meant cliffhanger. No idea where plot twist came from.

And I see, hm, thought the sharp teeth indicated Vampire, now I wonder what it actually does mean...



lordkaho -> RE: Essence of Murder- An Episode in London C&C (3/22/2012 4:05:14)

You might want to read the description again. That itself is pretty much a throw away on who we're dealing with here.



Glais -> RE: Essence of Murder- An Episode in London C&C (3/22/2012 4:07:13)

Ah right, me and my always missing of the detail...



Mortarion -> RE: Essence of Murder- An Episode in London C&C (3/22/2012 16:08:31)

I won't say catgirl, because I could be wrong, so, is the purple haired girl, a, well, feline girl? By the way you should draw her XD



lordkaho -> RE: Essence of Murder- An Episode in London C&C (3/22/2012 16:15:16)

But I already have. I mean who else wears a tiara and has purple hair? The only detail I forgot to mention is that she has glasses.



Mortarion -> RE: Essence of Murder- An Episode in London C&C (3/22/2012 16:27:36)

Wait, so you already drew her?



lordkaho -> RE: Essence of Murder- An Episode in London C&C (3/22/2012 22:02:50)

She's an already existing character. Try checking the Character Material. Same goes to her pale blue haired friend.



Glais -> RE: Essence of Murder- An Episode in London C&C (3/22/2012 22:07:16)

On that note, I'm somewhat disappointed it's her in particular, as she's my least favorite character of yours....however, writing may make her character likable. I'm willing to give it a chance at least.



lordkaho -> RE: Essence of Murder- An Episode in London C&C (3/22/2012 22:14:36)

Don't worry, it's not about her, but her companion. The title itself reflects that.



Glais -> RE: Essence of Murder- An Episode in London C&C (3/22/2012 22:16:44)

Oh I figured that, I just meant as far as Kharca's presence.



lordkaho -> RE: Essence of Murder- An Episode in London C&C (3/22/2012 22:32:34)

Nah, but you will see that she herself has a twisted view on justice and murder. She's not "evil" per se, but...let's just say she's "different".

I'll update later. The DF war has me hooked at the moment. Goes to show that I really miss the game. Hehe




lordkaho -> RE: Essence of Murder- An Episode in London C&C (3/23/2012 4:03:10)

New updates up.




Glais -> RE: Essence of Murder- An Episode in London C&C (3/23/2012 4:15:05)

That was sort of strange. Glad they didn't kill Jack though...sort of, just because I wished to see him a bit more in the future.
Hm, cannot form an adequate mental image for Maria...



Dwelling Dragonlord -> RE: Essence of Murder- An Episode in London C&C (3/23/2012 4:20:20)

I'll say up front that this is not the literature I normally read. *cracks knuckles.*

quote:

One man in particular, thought he could right wrongs by 'weeding' out the evils of society, oblivious to how his own actions has made him.


had

quote:

She wasn't able to convey emotions nor can she speak, but this woman knew how she was feeling but simply looking at her.


could, by



lordkaho -> RE: Essence of Murder- An Episode in London C&C (3/23/2012 4:27:42)

@Glaisaurus

I wanted to make Jack the Ripper look like an Extremist With Good Intentions, based off a recent depiction of him I saw lately. Him being a magus is something I just added up.

quote:

Hm, cannot form an adequate mental image for Maria...


How come? Do I need to make better descriptions?

quote:

I'll say up front that this is not the literature I normally read.


Not sure if this is a bad thing or a good thing. Is it related to having signs of sexual suspense? Trust me, I won't tread there.




Glais -> RE: Essence of Murder- An Episode in London C&C (3/23/2012 4:33:16)

I....have no idea. Since you know, I've seen your drawing of Maria. Doesn't add up really...



lordkaho -> RE: Essence of Murder- An Episode in London C&C (3/23/2012 4:35:25)

This Maria is the Bloody Effigy version. The one in tattered robes? I think I described all that.

Devil Maria doesn't happen until 2009 or so, and this is taking place in 1888.

EDIT:

Silly, me I forgot that Maria's hair was gray, not pale blue.




Glais -> RE: Essence of Murder- An Episode in London C&C (3/23/2012 4:50:13)

I know. Hence it not adding up that I can't picture it.
Not really a fan of the Devil maria design myself. Dat Ears...

@Below:Well...yeah, but they still remind me of bunny ears kind.



Dwelling Dragonlord -> RE: Essence of Murder- An Episode in London C&C (3/23/2012 4:52:56)

@glaisaurus_x: I think they're more like preying mantis antenna.



lordkaho -> RE: Essence of Murder- An Episode in London C&C (3/23/2012 4:58:38)

^

Or Feeler-like horns for that matter. Though I did have an image of a grass hopper on my head when I designed her.

Anyway, reason why I'm using the older version of Maria is that she got killed way too early in the current time line for me to flesh out what she was before.
This story will at least give some insight at how she was before being kidnappe...I mean borrowed by Kichijo.




Mortarion -> RE: Essence of Murder- An Episode in London C&C (3/23/2012 5:13:13)

I like Jack a lot, perphas instead of him getting killed, you could turn him into one of Kharca's minions



lordkaho -> RE: Essence of Murder- An Episode in London C&C (3/24/2012 1:10:59)

Finale is up.



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