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Riprose123 -> Blood for Blood. (DF) Discussion (6/8/2012 8:16:16)

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This is my version of the APR backstory. This was not meant to insult or in anyway degrade Stephen Nix's version, I just felt it did not accurately the clan I had joined and spent the last year with. I hope you enjoy it, and any critique, criticism, or comments are appreciated.



Glais -> RE: Blood for Blood. (DF) Discussion (6/8/2012 8:39:47)

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A Deathknight, and unknown to him soon to be Dragonlord, Bustechia Reki. A hero of his time

DRAT, THE ENDING HATH BEEN SPOILED.

That aside, I was a little hesitant once I saw it was a Clan backstory, as Clans always seemed to fit oddly with a serious DF setting, but I gave it the benefit of the doubt. And I am glad I did! You made it actually feel like it fit in perfectly to Lore. And I like the idea of this Stelios the half-Troll, that's something I'd not encountered before, plus I...don't know Stelios so I couldn't have known this. Quite interesting indeed.

I do however, feel the ending was kinda sudden. Reki kinda jumps to the conclusion that they should just...form a large group.

I assume you'll be writing how they form this then, as they're pretty poor now, living in a shack and all.



Riprose123 -> RE: Blood for Blood. (DF) Discussion (6/11/2012 22:46:09)

Oh trust me Glasaurus, that is far from the ending. And if you check the newest midget post of mine, I've begun spelling out how each member was recruited. I'll be getting into more detail of events and such later, but I'm going to get some people in here before that happens.

Anyways, next part is up.



Mortarion -> RE: Blood for Blood. (DF) Discussion (6/11/2012 23:22:25)

*hisses from the shadows* I'll be looking at this carefully, good luck with it *dissapears in the shadows in spider-esque sounds*



Glais -> RE: Blood for Blood. (DF) Discussion (6/12/2012 0:35:47)

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Oh trust me Glasaurus, that is far from the ending.

Well I just meant it kinda spoiled part of Reki's story, which I've been following with great interest.

Will try to read the new part soon then edit this post with opinions.



Dwelling Dragonlord -> RE: Blood for Blood. (DF) Discussion (6/12/2012 8:07:32)

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It all started on the fifth month of the eleventh year. Three people met in a small cabin halfway between Falconreach and Valderouche. A Deathknight, and unknown to him soon to be Dragonlord, Bustechia Reki. A hero of his time, his sword was almost as sharp as his tongue. He had temper that would melt the glacier of Dragsvard, and often found himself gripping a blade against evil.


Verteroche? Dragesvard

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Stelios would turn out to be one of the greatest phoenixs ever to grace this clan.

phoenixes

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MAgic is a powerful thing, and magic that powerful must hve been hardwired into the creature’s DNA


Magic, have

I like the story, but I couldn't help but feel amused when you mentioned a "dying phoenix" only to hear a claim that its blood would make people immortal a short while after. I can understand Riprose's sentiment.



Riprose123 -> RE: Blood for Blood. (DF) Discussion (6/12/2012 11:48:44)

Thanks for the editing DD, I always appreciate it when someone tells me when I make a mistake. If only my editor had more free time. >.>

I'll probably post more this afternoon/nightish, depending if I can stop procrastinating.



Arthur -> RE: Blood for Blood. (DF) Discussion (6/12/2012 12:01:56)

Hey Rip,
Decided to drop by.

The story appears interesting so far.
It tells me of our origins.

I have a question, will you be posting only the origins or APR as it is now andas itwill be.



Riprose123 -> RE: Blood for Blood. (DF) Discussion (6/12/2012 12:42:11)

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I have a question, will you be posting only the origins or APR as it is now andas it will be.


I'll probably keep this as up to date as possible, I'm just trying to get there now.



Glais -> RE: Blood for Blood. (DF) Discussion (6/17/2012 17:15:14)

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plus two flaming burst ghost touch great sword of speed

Oh mang xP I can't help but feel this is SOOOO out of place but at the same time it's barely ridiculous enough that I like it.

Cursed One seems like he could be fun.

Anyhow, I like that you worked to make all the various Characters in the Clan fit with the DF World. I notice whenever Clans are usually mentioned they feel out of place and too...non-canon.



Riprose123 -> RE: Blood for Blood. (DF) Discussion (6/17/2012 20:56:07)

SOMEONE FINALLY BROUGHT THAT UP!

It is ridiculous. It's a poke at my friend Titan. A little D&D mention. He hated the MMO that spawned off the table top RPG, so I'm poking fun by giving his character a long and overly complicated weapon. :3



Glais -> RE: Blood for Blood. (DF) Discussion (6/19/2012 6:01:21)

Ridiculous indeed.

I still wonder why Reki randomly decided "We need a team" though. That's pretty Axe Cop.



Riprose123 -> RE: Blood for Blood. (DF) Discussion (6/24/2012 22:49:31)

I finally updated this. I was getting worried, I was busy. So, anyway, it's up, hope you like it and what not.



Glais -> RE: Blood for Blood. (DF) Discussion (6/24/2012 23:09:41)

Not bad, though Oddball in general just feels off. Mainly because that's his actual RP name apparently, and thus just feels out of place.

Odd, why do you at first say there was nothing soectacular about Morgan's joining when it was by far the most interesting of circumstances?



Riprose123 -> RE: Blood for Blood. (DF) Discussion (6/24/2012 23:43:58)

Damn, I did write that didn't I? *Goes to fix*

The thing is, I had everyone submit a form I typed out for this project, and Odd just put "Oddball" down. So, that's what I used. And I can't really yell at him right now, so yeah...

Next part is up, I'm on a roll tonight!



Glais -> RE: Blood for Blood. (DF) Discussion (6/24/2012 23:45:15)

Well yeah, it is his character after all.

Also, for some reason it kinda bugs me that you didn't say you mixed the Pheonix blood with Morgan, even though it is heavily pointed out later.

Guess I'll edit this with feedback later.



Riprose123 -> RE: Blood for Blood. (DF) Discussion (6/25/2012 0:19:52)

Eh, I felt it was one of those things that was so blatantly obvious that it wouldn't need explaining.



Glais -> RE: Blood for Blood. (DF) Discussion (6/25/2012 0:42:15)

Exactly. Which is why I don't know why it bugs me so much xD it makes no sense.



Dwelling Dragonlord -> RE: Blood for Blood. (DF) Discussion (6/25/2012 10:03:06)

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and it smelt like the fire of a dragon.


smelled

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heal his wounds with the runes I had known at the time.


knew

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I spent a few long hours as he lay asleep studying the marking on his arms.


markings (plural, right?)

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Next what the lycanthrope, Shadows Morgenstern.


was

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Though most of the Dravir at the time were in Willowshire, fighting the guardians and heros.


heroes Hahaha, that's what you think.

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he ate hungrily

He

A demigod, a lycan and a runemage sitting in their cabin when ....



Arthur -> RE: Blood for Blood. (DF) Discussion (6/25/2012 10:14:41)

Hmmm...

Hey Rip,

Your story reminded me, I need to start with my own project.

APR-Dark, remember?



Riprose123 -> RE: Blood for Blood. (DF) Discussion (6/25/2012 12:08:16)

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A demigod, a lycan and a runemage sitting in their cabin when ....


I'm trying to figure out if that's a reference or something. >.>

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Hey Rip,

Your story reminded me, I need to start with my own project.

APR-Dark, remember?


I honestly thought you killed that. ._.



Arthur -> RE: Blood for Blood. (DF) Discussion (6/25/2012 12:14:12)

@Rip, lemme help you.

Why does thay reference remind me of the story, " The Werewolf and the Vampire"?

And no, how could I kill that project?



Riate -> RE: Blood for Blood. (DF) Discussion (6/30/2012 13:31:56)

Oh god Rip, I am in love with your story.

Odd's a demi-god? As if I didn't have enough reasons to be terrified of him ._.



TitanDragonLord -> RE: Blood for Blood. (DF) Discussion (6/30/2012 17:39:30)

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plus two flaming burst ghost touch great sword of speed

I'm totally gonna kill you one day rip [:D]
keep up the good work bro!



Riprose123 -> RE: Blood for Blood. (DF) Discussion (7/9/2012 13:48:30)

Kay, finally got around to updating this. New part is up, hope you all like it



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