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Dwelling Dragonlord -> RE: Another Day as a Hero Commentary (6/27/2012 12:51:16)
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or warning his friends nearby about the impending doom?
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Looks like good writing to me, but Drakath was purple and "The Master" was red. When this was what you intended to say, I'd suggest you turn this into one paragraph.
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The Doom Lord’s servant had betrayed him in his moment of final glory, turned himself into a Darkness Dragon of unrelenting power. Only with the combined abilities of Sepulchure and the Hero did the dragon fall. The victory did not last, as the Doom Lord’s master arrived and revealed his true intentions to his little, red-armored pawn. He had simply used Sepulchure, he explained, to create a form strong enough to inhabit. The Master was a shadow being, and could not exist in the open light without a solid body or form, and with the slaying of the dragon…the Hero and Doom Lord has supplied him with one.
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