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Sir Arceon -> A Dracopyre's Lament C&C (7/31/2012 12:50:06)

The story of how I became a Dracopyre.

Constructive Criticism only, por favor.



Dwelling Dragonlord -> RE: A Dracopyre's Lament C&C (7/31/2012 14:01:06)

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Horns grew from y forehead, which becae plated with golden scales as hard as stainless steel.

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I felt energy piling up in my throat, and instinctively released it in a concentrated beam in the Werepyres' direction One of them was hit hard, and fell to the ground, the energy coursing through him.

You need punctuation here.

I have a couple of questions regarding the story itself.

1. Isn't it a public secret that Cenara is a Dracopyre?

2. Was there any particular reason as to why he thought he could hurt Gracefang?



Sir Arceon -> RE: A Dracopyre's Lament C&C (7/31/2012 20:33:48)

1. My "M" key keeps messing up.

2. My bad.


1. My character was one of those people who participated in the "Nightreign and Gracefang are born!" war, and he got the whole story from Dewlok.

2. You think you'd be able to handle all those murderous, destructive instincts at once?



Dwelling Dragonlord -> RE: A Dracopyre's Lament C&C (8/2/2012 9:18:44)

No, I meant to say that Gracefang held her own against Nightreign who is no pushover himself.



Glais -> RE: A Dracopyre's Lament C&C (8/8/2012 2:46:09)

What is a Skull Ape?

That aside, an enjoyable read and writing itself was solid. I do feel it was missing a sort of...serious atmosphere I guess?



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