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Dwelling Dragonlord -> RE: =AQ= The Fall of the Fisherman War Stories and Poems Commentary (9/24/2012 9:58:45)
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We fret about too many things some times I suppose.
sometimes, I suppose
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After slaying more monsters BlackAces returns to camp as night falls to rest for another day of the war. While at camp BlackAces begins to think to himself:
returned, fell
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I wonder how long I can keep battling<> I've been through so many wars I've lost count of how many monsters I've slain.
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Elryn: "After this war is over I will be leaving BattleOn as I believe I will need to travel outside of my hometown in order to progress myself as an ArchMagi<> there is only so much I can learn here. I do not know how long I will be gone for<> but I will surely return one day more powerful than the day I left."
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Since when is BattleOn Elryn's hometown? I thought you said he was raised somewhere else?
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BlackAces: "I see<> well it is understandable there is only so much one can learn from one place<> you need to move and travel to learn new things in order to become more powerful, I went on a trip like this once a few years ago I was gone approximately a year and I learnt quite a bit so I believe it will do you good.
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Mystical Warrior: "You are embarking on quite the journey Elryn<> I wish you luck and hope that you remain safe on your travels and return safely whenever that may be."
Elryn: "Thank you both for your kinds words but I feel like I interrupted something as I arrived, did I?"
,/. | kind, as if, didn't
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Elryn: "I see<> so you were discussing the new age of heroes that will have to replace the legacy left behind<> well there are lots of capable heroes out there that can carry on in our absence."
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Mystical Warrior: "That's what we were just discussing before<> but I think we should discuss that more in detail once the war is over and focus on what we need to do now."
Elryn: "I'm glad I wasn't the only one thinking about this on my way back to camp<> but I see your point we should discuss matters like this once the war is done with."
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Forgive me, but the last three sentences felt like repeating yourself three times over.
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The three continue to talk about their plans on the final day of the war...
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''Jacques has been bestowed the power of Earth, Wind and Darkness by the clans.
Water
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Where a moment ago layed Jacques now lied three of him.
stood/lied (A chicken/dragon laying an egg or an egg lying in the sun.)
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A roar came from the Jacques three.
third Jacques/three copies of Jacques
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Right before him lied a gear portal.
Unless I'm not getting the right picture here, "had opened up".
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It has been causing us a worlds of trouble... But ti seems BlackAces now has things under control.''
world(?), it
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his sight does not cross Jacques as though he is not worth looking at.
did, was
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From their position, the guardians may see BlackAces unsheathing his sword, the Striborg Blade.
witnessed
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Tears drops of pure azure rise from the ground around BlackAces, like rains drop dropping from a cloud in reversed gravity.
Teardrops, rose, raindrops
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An azure blue glow fills BlackAces's eyes.
filled
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''On it!'' And with that, Karuna dashed off for the battleground of the two fighters.
Don't you mean six?
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