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Dwelling Dragonlord -> RE: Fallen Empire Commentary (11/29/2012 18:10:19)
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The two moons on the planet of Dromund Kaas were visible on the night
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a Sith Lord by the name of Darth Mundus well known in the capitol of the Sith Empire<> his power was so great he was even feared by the Dark Council <> any weakness they found would be exploited.
. H, that
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The truth is he did have a weakness, a weakness that could be so easily exploited he could would not be the pawn of the Dark Council games oh no...
was that, , but he, Council's
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Mundus would choose self preservation over his son and his "wife" while he may love them a Sith has no need for love, they would not be his weakness, their pain and suffering would fuel him.
self-preservation, loved, had
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He finally reached his destination and prepared mentally for the deed that he was about to commit<> even for a Sith Lord this was not easy.
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He proceeded up the steps of the castle, <> his mind preparing, the reasons he was going to do the unthinkable, his hate towards the council with each step he became stronger; he reached the door, he did not knock he unleashed the force upon the door blowing them open and ignited his Lightsaber, the hum of the sword and his mind was the only thing that he could hear <> he blocked the screams of the servants that his crimson sword was cutting down, no survivors he thought as they would turn on him if the chance presented.
in, justifications he had for doing the unthinkable, hatred towards towards the council became stronger with each step, he reached the doors, he did not knock but simply unleash a force wave which caused them to blow open violently, as
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He finally reached his wife room
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his son a boy with straight brown hair and golden eyes that marked him as a powerful user of the darkside of the force.
Clearly this is missing a description on what he did in that room.
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He hugged and kisses his wife on the head without hesitation and emotion impaled her on the abdomen his won watched in terror as his mother was killed in front of his very eyes.
kissed, before impaling her on the abdomen without hesitation or emotion as, son
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Darth Mundus approached his son and gripped the hilt of his Light Saber tighter as he prepared to cut down his son, his legacy<> the child was not weak as his mother he feed on her mothers fleeing life force and terror to become stronger and used the force as a defensive mechanism to take away his father lightsaber.
. T, like, he fed on his mother's
A bit vague here, it is clear that the boy disarms his own father yet what happens to the lightsaber? Does he grab it or aimlessly tosses it out of his father's (physical) reach?
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Mundus was astounded as this great feat<> no one has ever been able to remove his lightsaber from his hand<> not even other Sith Lords<> and yet this boy was able to rob him of his weapon.
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"this boy" sounds like it is a stranger, which is strange as it is his own son.
A question about the story in general, how did the Dark Council not find out about his family after all those years?
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