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Glais -> RE: (DF) The Forbitten truth knight. (3/11/2013 7:37:03)
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That... colors I've seen. That... shapes.
The or Those
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It's time for you to hear somethings.
Something
It feels a bit rushed so far as well as short.
Due to its lack of length there...isn't really much I can add easily. I mean I can blankly say "add more detaiL!" etc. but that doesn't really help you as a writer.
Hmm.
Perhaps simply think of a few more events to fill up the chapters themselves. Short chapters aren't necessarily bad, but they still need to be long enough to convey the event.
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