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Dwelling Dragonlord -> RE: (DF)The Phantom Aftermath CnC (4/14/2013 17:23:23)
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It was only a few years back that I had been promoted to the post of a senior commanding officer among the Guardians.
Am I to understand that Kain is the leader of the Guardians stationed in Falconreach in your story?
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'It was a calm day, as any other and I was just returning from my shift on top of the Guardian Tower.
If that is the case this feals like a menial task for one of such position.
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As I opened the door and entered the Guardian Lounge of the Tower, a flurry of sound and activity invaded my tired ears at once. Half a dozen new recruits were sitting around a wooden table and playing a game of cards, youthful and carefree, they reminded me of my own days as a recruit. It was only a few years back that I had been promoted to the post of a senior commanding officer among the Guardians.
The Guardian barracks are located on the same floor as Lady Celestia's statue is. As a reader without prior knowledge I probably read this as if the Lounge is beneath the latch. Some description of going down the stairs might be nice.
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I nodded in reply adding a warm smile in return as I passed by the central room and headed down the gallery towards the dormitories that made up the back of the Tower, the side facing the open seas.
Seeing there's only a small body of water which connects to the seas and oceans of Lore, I would consider it to be "sea" at best.
I'm interested as to where this is going.
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