Dwelling Dragonlord -> RE: Primordials Commentary (5/8/2013 17:06:10)
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The Warlic told his hand pulled himself up using the war engine behind him for support. What are you trying to say here? quote:
“You have my thanks<> Artix,” answered Warlic as he patted the dirt off his sleeves and then returned his eyes to the portal, “but I’m afraid we are too late.” , You mention "After Chaos", I am not familiar with that reading and I doubt most others would be. What is exactly is that about? I think the story is good for the most part, but I'd break the wall of text into some smaller paragraphs to make it easier to read. The conversations too could do with a bit space in between to make them stand out.
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