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hict98 -> RE: =AQ= Golems at Granemor War Stories and Poems Commentary (5/30/2013 17:14:33)
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@Disc Lorde I am happy to see someone actually writing a war story. You've got interest so far and I do hope you write more to finish the story.
@Popin I like how the story starts out so far. Let's see if you can continue on with it. Also don't worry about having too many adjectives. It gives the reader a better visaul and makes them feel more engrossed in the world you have created. It also helps a lot to show the vision that you had. This makes it easier on the reader so they won't have to make their own vision for what you have.
@Klimg I love the story. I haven't read one like this yet, it is nice to have something new. I love how it is like a journal entry, the narration is great. At first it was so interesting until I got to that last paragraph, then I really got interested. I hope to see some more.
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