popinloopy -> RE: =AQ= Xov's Assault stories and poetry Commentary (6/23/2013 22:33:58)
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@Muchiha I refuse to go down. Even if it ends up that way, expect half of an army to go down with me! #ForPaxia! Part two is fantastic, Muchiha. There are some minor typos here and there, but that doesn't matter. If you want a bit of honesty from me, then the dialouge is too split. Too many people just seem to automatically know how to continue what the previous person has said. I know you tried to introduce more characters, and you found an excelent way to do that, but you might have just spread the speach too much between the characters. Just an opinion, though.
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