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Sir Arceon -> (AQ) Hearts of Black Fire (Drakonnax Snugglefest 2014) CnC (2/15/2014 23:08:42)

Yet another story.

Why the new format? Well, the traditional way to write these things is somewhat time-consuming, and very difficult to get exactly right, so I thought I'd change it up.

Please give me ONLY constructive criticism and positive feedback. In particular, please let me know what you think of me using script style.



Dwelling Dragonlord -> RE: (AQ) Hearts of Black Fire (Drakonnax Snugglefest 2014) CnC (2/16/2014 6:34:15)

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Amoria: YES YOU DO!! You think I don't know Galanoth give them to you last week!?

gave you a pair

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All sit down. Drakonnax, being a gentleman, begins to set everyone's place on the picnic blanket.

That was a missed opportunity for Drakonnax/Amoria to instruct ElBhe on how to behave on a date, if you ask me. I know your character wants to make a good impression on his date, but wasn't the point of him coming along was to give ElBhe some advice on dating?

I must admit that I was slightly disappointed to learn that this story wasn't about the Dragonheart artefact because it had me intrigued.

I don't know about this style. It is reminiscent to the style people use for writing quests. The only thing I can tell you with certainty is that if you wish to give us a list with equipment Drakonnax is wearing then either give us a link to the item in question or provide a description.



Sir Arceon -> RE: (AQ) Hearts of Black Fire (Drakonnax Snugglefest 2014) CnC (2/16/2014 8:28:48)

Thank you, again, Dwelling. I suppose I should've provided links, but the thought didn't occur to me at the time. And regarding the Dragonheart... well, I won't spoil anything, but keep in mind this is an unfinished product. I still have plenty of time to get it just right.



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