DidYouKnowThat -> RE: =OS= Beta Release Thread 142 - READ THE FIRST POST (2/21/2014 1:38:04)
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Yep, sounds great! But uhm: Instead of ''and hope they will experience exciting stuff,'' how about ''and hope they will gain an exciting experience?'' Refrain from general words like 'cool' and 'stuff.' Another example I got from your post was -> ''The story goes with 2 man went to explore a dark lake quite near to their hometown, Solace, for some exploration.'' Sounds a bit. . .off. Instead of that, you CAN put ''The legend goes with two men who went exploring a dark lake quite near their hometown Solace, for some ???'' ??? Can be -> Discoveries or Treasure or. . . .Artifacts? Anything, but exploring for some exploration sounds a tad bit weird.
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