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Razen -> (DF) Sir Kresmir's Tale Commentary (4/28/2014 20:27:58) Prologue is here. This is going to be for comments on the prologue to my new war story character, Sir Kresmir, as well as potentially being the place for commentary of posthumous war stories if that is acceptable. What I have so far is a rough draft, so I'm entirely open to critiques and commentary.

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Dwelling Dragonlord -> RE: (DF) Sir Kresmir's Tale Commentary (4/29/2014 5:35:36) How long did the "alliance"/friendly interactions between Skalgrass and the Ice Elves exist by the time of your story? Secondly, you refer to them as snow elves at times. Is that intentional? I'd say that it does set the mood for future chapters rather well.

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Razen -> RE: (DF) Sir Kresmir's Tale Commentary (4/29/2014 7:10:54) I'd say that Skalgrass and the Ice Elves have been trading likely for about a hundred years. Aisha's reign didn't get involved with Skalgrass because Dragesvard, Galanoth, and the Hero were considered a priority rather than a trade partner. I refer to them as snow elves at times just because. It's simply like if I called wind elves breeze elves or something. It's just another way to refer to the race.

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Chaosweaver Amon -> RE: (DF) Sir Kresmir's Tale Commentary (5/3/2014 22:17:44) Pretty solid. Not much to say about it, I'm intrigued. Although judging by the description you gave, Kresimir's outfit looks wretched.

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