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The White Knight -> Criticism for Night of Knights Story (5/14/2014 4:15:35)

Here so you guys can bash me all you want :3, plus I love to see what other people think <3

Here is the story: Night of Knights




UnderSoul -> RE: Criticism for Night of Knights Story (5/14/2014 10:02:52)

The setup seems really good, but it's kind of hard to read. I recommend paragraph breaks for dialogue to make it less like a giant menacing block of evil text. The story itself kind of gives off a Black Ops 2 meets Custom Robo feel, which is good.




The White Knight -> RE: Criticism for Night of Knights Story (5/14/2014 14:21:34)

I gave up after black ops one, custom robo, I admit I did play, but definitely not going for that feel D:. Thank you Undersoul for the criticism, I'll keep adding we'll see where it goes [:)]!

Edit: Also it seems I already made the paragraph indentations... but it won't accept them ._.




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