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Dwelling Dragonlord -> RE: (DF) The Sweetest Medicine - A Warlic/Hero Fanfic (12/28/2016 12:07:16)
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“Flattering, my dear. But you should know by now, I would’ve understand not seeing your sweet face if it meant you were taking time to recover…”
Understood
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Warlic spoke, not in condemnation, but with hints of worry at his younger lover’s careless disregard of his own personal well being.
Wellbeing/well-being
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And Gren didn’t anticipate falling ill after visiting Dragsvard, but look at him now.
Dragesvard
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It simply mean I am an unpredictable force; you, however, are a dangerous entity in disguise, yearning to break free of that fragile form you’ve taken.
means that
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“Who, me? Never!” the dragon replied jovially, as if the previous conversation in the kitchen <> never occurred.
had
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Once finished, Warlic was shocked to see Gren had rose up from the couch, his bag once more slung over his shoulder.
risen
The story is well-written overall, any problems a reader could have would probably stem from their taste.
I like the descriptive writing. It helps the mind's eye to visualize and gives flavour to the sentences.
If you would like feedback on anything specific I did not mention, be sure to let me know.
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