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10/21/2010 0:34:15

Shreder
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It seems you've gone a long while without a comment--let's rectify that. :P

I really liked "Stealing", it generally flowed well and I loved the imagery you used--it really strengthened the poem. I do, however, have a few small suggestions:

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When no ones home?

This line would be more grammatically correct if you changed it to either "When no one is home?" or "When nobody's home".

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Not black or white.

Perhaps "Neither black nor white" would be more correct?

Anyways, overall I thought it was quite good.

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6/11/2012 19:49:06

Poetic Melody
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Well, hello world. I am back. This week I'm going to try finish all my edits (took me long enough.) And if I don't finish it, I think I'll just keep it and call it a different era. I haven't written anything in... forever. I'm planning on changing that. So watch for me this Summer. I'll be coming back. :) Miss you all so much!

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