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5/8/2011 11:42:14   
Mortarion
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He wanted slaves, as simply as that, and he likes to make things personally
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5/8/2011 13:39:17   
Glais
Member

I read it a while ago, a bit weird but I can get the basic story.
But there is one thing I can't get over, the name "BosterBlader" is just to ridiculous. Doesn't fit in at all...
DF MQ  Post #: 52
5/8/2011 14:33:52   
Mortarion
Member

NAh will change it then, to Cruor changed it to cruor, aswell as some grammatical errors

< Message edited by Delex -- 5/8/2011 14:40:25 >

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5/8/2011 14:44:46   
Glais
Member

Cruor fits much better, good choice.
DF MQ  Post #: 54
5/8/2011 14:49:32   
Mortarion
Member

Cruor is blood in latin
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5/9/2011 9:30:39   
Mritha
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 If Malorum wanted slaves, then why did he burn so many of the vilagers alive when he could have taken them as captives?
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5/9/2011 13:43:15   
Mortarion
Member

He burned those who opposed him and as a tactic ofcourse, to undermine morale, I meant he burned lots of people that surely subdues someone
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5/9/2011 14:36:58   
Mritha
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 Well, add that in your story.
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5/9/2011 18:19:45   
Mortarion
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It is in o_O
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5/9/2011 18:24:31   
Mritha
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 Ahh so it is. My apologies I must have missed that the first time.
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5/9/2011 18:29:38   
Mortarion
Member

Do not worry Ma'am
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6/2/2011 13:54:54   
Mortarion
Member

Curious fact about me, negative feeling are what gives me inspiration
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6/23/2011 20:19:32   
Mortarion
Member

Posted some poetry
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9/15/2011 17:40:41   
Mortarion
Member

hey dudes I wans wondering if I should make a history for my chaos weaver nation character Ra'aret and I was thinking of writting about an adventurer that spent too much time in the void or in the shadow real, I still haven't decided, what do you think it's best guys?, that lost his humanity and wants to turn other beings in creatures like himself, or you think I should finish Path to madness first?
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9/15/2011 17:42:37   
aizenv3
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 Finish what you have now so your ideas wont be scattered, and you will become a scatter-brain if you just stop leaving a stroy in mid-air to do another one.

~Aizen V.3
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9/15/2011 17:43:59   
Mortarion
Member

lol I am already a scatter brain, hmm I'll revise what I did the last time in path to madness and I'l start with the new chapter now, but do you like the concept?
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9/15/2011 17:58:36   
aizenv3
Banned


 The concept is original, I can tell you that at the least.
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9/15/2011 18:03:23   
Mortarion
Member

Thxs, btw I did some small tweaks here and there in Path to madness, care to check them out, I want to be sure that it's understandable, anda pleasure to read
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9/15/2011 18:10:26   
Mortarion
Member

Could someone check the mistakes I did, please i tweaked so it isn't so repetitive with the name
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9/16/2011 2:44:17   
Glais
Member

Interesting twist there, what with the name change and added details (such as Mort/Cruor and Malorum being from another country and such).
I did catch a few spots where "Bosterblader" was still there instead of Cruor, nameley at the beginning and in Cruor's first flashback.
DF MQ  Post #: 70
9/16/2011 10:45:58   
Mortarion
Member

Ups I'll fix it up asap, and a little twits, Malorum is latin for Evil and Cruor is latin for blood/bloodshed
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9/16/2011 10:50:21   
Glais
Member

Heh cool, why DID he change his name anyways?
DF MQ  Post #: 72
9/16/2011 10:54:00   
Mortarion
Member

well he didn't changed his name, but you'll see it soon
AQ DF MQ AQW Epic  Post #: 73
10/5/2011 21:07:25   
The Hollow Soul
Member

I very much enjoyed the story Mort, a few Grammatical errors here and there, but over all good storyline.
my only tip would be to keep adding fixes to your grammar and to keep explaining your characters with as much detail as you can.
Keep up the good work
DF  Post #: 74
10/5/2011 21:11:02   
Mortarion
Member

This is chapter 1, it's meant to explain Mortarion :), so care to tell me what you liked the most?
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