Drakkoniss
Creative! Constructive!
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I agree; Something needs to be done. Personally, I think actually adding in the ability to save Demo's dad, or at least find out what happened to him, would be a good place to start. They should have done this long ago. Next, they need to show repercussions for the previous events that we've lost, such as melancholy with the heroes, but also put a possitive spin on things, and show hope for the future. Next, they need to make a bit of storyline where the heroes will definitely win, like Corporal (though you could choose to be a villain, you're just acting as an opportunistic mercenary, really). I can understand why she might feel that way, with the negative reactions of so many. Personally, I would've chastised her about the irritating foolishness of not coming to other people with the problem, but I'd be understanding and pity her situation. As you can see by my previous bit, I agree with your oppinion on what she should have done. ;) ... I find it odd that he doesn't recognize who is Demolicious, the supposed drunk, considering the apparent news coverage of the war, and the fact that she said that was who she was on the phone call... I have to admit, though, you seem to have shown his personality quite well, compared to the game, and with his dialogue in there in mind. Ah, red... I had forgotten which color Atroxia represented. I very much like red. Good of you to bring up the color associations every once in a while. As you have already adressed what was meant by calling him "uncle", I won't dwell on that too much other than to state that he probably found that quite weird, considering that is New York, and such terms are not used so often in such a way on this continent. However, as it is New York City, and many odd things go on in there, he almost certainly understood who was being refered to by it, though. Meh, it depends on the twins, and whether they were from the same egg, or not, if they look about the same ,that old. Oh, with the Orangutan references... lol Interesting description. The feet do look somewhat reminescent of lion paws, but I do not see shark fins... The illusion of that may be noticed if you aren't fighting them, but that's just the housing for the head, as can be seen if you are fighting them. Hmm... again, it is mentioned that her speech seems slurred because of how woosy her injury to the head has apparently made her. Tying it to her hand's probably a good idea, considering the head injury, too. XP What I don't understand is why their power sources are able to be easily taken. -_- Interesting that they refer to hands as paws... I am yet again reminded how annoying that man is, as well. Selfish, too. Cut off their claws with what bladed weapon they seem to have? MUAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHA!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! *pounds desk* Such advanced machines, and they can't handle a little water?!?!?!?!?!?! OOOOoooh, that's good. quote:
"Oh," XD (If you look back in your story, you'll understand) That's not entirely true... Alot of people might panickingly pack stuff up, and then run. lol That depends on if they were actually in the home, and not just the hallways, as I am assuming happened first, but meh. ... CURSE YOU, INACTIVE IDIOTIC ROBOTS OF DOOM!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! XP Just plain robots? That's a horrible thing to say! It's as if robots can't be people, too!!! *coughAzimoffIndustriescough* He reminds me of Tony Stark... but apparently not rich enough to afford a mansion, instead of an apartment, or if not, unable to either afford or creat adequate security. :/ ... That's assuming the eyes had proper wiring, were compatible with a biological supercomputer (the brain), were of a manner that would allow them to have a form of sight that is similar enough to a human, ect.... The real question is who that actually is, though. Soaked batteries could potentially be hazardous to your health, when they had previously been involved in a malfunction of that sort. *facepalm* They really should invent some sort of insurance for such things, considering the city... Also, what of the APBs that were there? -That- is rather annoying. A guy expects you to go buy him such a thing, that will cost so much, and only offers to pay for half! Horrible... I can barely believe they are so generous. -.- I'd ask about her having gotten brain dmg, but meh. Sadly, the pic doesn't look like Atroxia's yelling. :/ *insert "Robin Hood: Men in Tights" reference here* I'd like to reassert the brain damage theory about now. *facepalms at Antares's comment* Why is she the symbol of all that is good, anyway? -_- To be fair, I have never met her, and she very well could act the part, as well, but in your story, she doesn't seem deserving of such a title to me. :/ Oh, yes, and considering the fact that you plan on seperating yourself from the storyline in-game, care on giving me a cameo as being one of the main people to fight in the war alongside Demolicious? I was zealous about that war, up untill the end. She hurt herself, when DaVinci was the cause of it? *harumphs* Personally, I think it's everyone's fault on the Hero side for not killing DaVinci, to a degree, though I am still reluctant to do such a thing in cold blood. *turns his head away with a look of indignation on his face* *sighs and facepalms in melancholic semi-annoyance at the foolishness of Herakaris's decision* If she had broken her leg badly enough, she could have had a very bad infection. Along with that, you'd at the very least want and actual doctor to check her out, regardless, just to make sure, especially considering the nature of how she got the inujury. Reading that Hera knew, even if she didn't remember the fact that her mother wasn't working at the time makes it even worse. -.- I wouldn't consider that blackmail, but meh. PAH! Like it's supposed to? Foolish scientist, thinking such a thing. It is merely that the fool assumed it would be able to do certain things, and that anyone other than Pandora could make use of its power, anyway. Pinnochia... XP *makes a comment about his insanity, which even villains that supported him could see if they talked to him after they finished the Park War storyline* To be fair, though, DaVinci, while being overly paranoid in the matter, does have somewhat of a point, not wanting to tell people about his plans. Oh, the foolishness/idiocy of some people. The guy should know/understand who he was talking about, based on what actually happened in the park war. I think the rest of that chapter is enough for now... Also, I have an odd question that has a good chance of being incorrect. Is that person who was insulted by DaVinci Scrooge? ... I wish I'd see you in-game more. :/
< Message edited by Drakkoniss -- 2/9/2012 10:14:52 >
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