Dwelling Dragonlord
ArchKnight AQ / OOC / L&L
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I keep forgetting that your story is being edited and thus not on top. Let's go over it, shall we? quote:
She twirled a finger through her brown hair, as she was wont to do when in deep thought. What are you trying to say here? quote:
"I mean, sure you told use about this sort of thing when we were young but...did you honestly expect us to believe that?!?" us quote:
"I'm simply going to have to as you both to just...trust me." I don't quite follow what he's saying here. Well, the chapter seems pretty nice. With this rewrite, are you going to make it 950+ years prior to DF?
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