Fallen Leprechaun of L&L
Hello there, #legend179#!
quote:There ought to be an apostrophe between "man" and "s", showing that the anger belongs to the man.
The world of Aldmoor is in ruins. An empire, leaderless for the first time in centuries. An entire race, eradicated over a lone mans anger.
quote:The bolded word "their" should be its homophone "there". The word "their" is possessive, which doesn't make sense in the beginning part of the sentence.
But their are magics, dark magics from places beyond the gods' reach, that only grew stronger in their absence.
And, last thing, I have a question about the Trisummit Tribunal. It's designed to keep peace between three different kingdoms, right, but you listed eight kingdoms/empires afterwards. How do they fit with the Tribunal, if at all?
It looks fine, though. So far it is a nice explanation of what the world of the story will be like. Feel free to add more detail that can make it clear to the reader, and I hope to see you posting again soon!