Not approved. The aim of this step of the Role Playing Academy is to create an original character, and by your own admission, this is not one such person. While I do find this character interesting, and hope to see her in other places, perhaps even in other role plays or in the Legends and Lore, The Dreamtime requires a brand new character.
Some things to keep in mind for future attempts: First and most importantly, watch your gender pronouns. Multiple times in this bio you switched between feminine and masculine pronouns, from 'she' to 'he' a couple of times even in the same paragraph, such as "She’s not usually one to plan out things regularly. Due to this; she tends to jump into action before thinking anything through. Only when she’s extremely serious about certain actions that she would plan things out - in itself is rather rare to see. ( And his planning skills are really terrible at that. )" where for the entirety of the paragraph you used the female 'she' but in the parenthetical suddenly switched to the masculine 'his' to describe the skills.
Also, watch your grammar. There were a few instances of sentences that didn't seem quite complete, or tense confusion. These are things that a beta reader, should you know someone you trust to look over your posts to spot those small mistakes, would be able to catch and help you correct.
All in all, this is an interesting character who I'd love to see more of in a different setting, and I look forward to seeing what characters you come up with both for this and other role plays. ~Gingkage
Oh boy here we go. Also, this is a character I have used many times in multiple settings, so if you find anything that's not in Lore ( Say, Jorrhildr, Regalia, ect. ) please tell me!
Source Setting: AQW, since Its the only game that I'm even close to on event updates.
Name: Alyona Dorofei Vandinin
Age Range: Nineteen, but will be twenty by December 22nd.
Race (Pure or halfbreed only):Former human until infected with Vampirism
Appearance (Build, hair, skin, clothes...):
Alyona stands at the height of 5”8 and weighs in about 189 pounds. She has an athletic body build, as from both the vampirism effects and her former occupation as a huntress. However, her shape resembles more of a triangle then any other possible shapes there may be. This is characterized by a defined waist and hips more fuller then her upper body parts, resulting in a pear-like shape.
Alyona has an extremely pale complexity, almost as white as the snow of the upper continents of lore, as where she’s from, and her vampirism with barely any interaction with sunlight itself.
Alyona has very little body hair on her, it’s there - but not a easily visible amount of.
Alyona has a head of a circular heart, her chin is a bit pointed - but not by too much. Her nose is a straight bridge down. Her eyes form as a shape of almonds, with high cheekbones. Her forehead is in a medium size. Her ear-lobes are unattached, she has the ability to twitch her ears.
Formerly a deep green, hue eyes are now of a crimson hue from the effects of vampirism. Her usual expression is a cheery one without a frown, it’s not a smile of intimidation, simply a regular grin.
The sanguine has dark dry brunette hair that would had fallen onto the length of her knees - although she currently keeps it in a rather untidy braid. Though the stray hair coming out from the thick locks of hair - it is quite sturdy. Her fringe has bits of hair hanging between her eyes, although later cut off the long bit of it once it began to bother her eyes. Her sidebangs are curled into the direction of her cheeks.
Alyona currently has no scars or tattoos at the moment.
Clothing and Accessories
The brunette currently wears a white turtleneck blouse that stretches onto her neck. Over it is a dark purple coat-like button vest with even darker purple linings and dark gray buttoning. It reaches down onto her waist where a pair of black leather pants are, slightly worn out by constant walking and other activities that the vampire may do. Her footwear consists of a pair of gray boots that reach up to her knees, covering some of the leather pants. She has a pair of sheaths that rest two types of swords, and a throwing knife that she had picked up.
The sanguine isn’t much of a fan of wearing important items in the outside and so tends not to hold anything close to her on while wandering through her residence. She’ll only put anything of value to her on when she’s in a place that she would see as ‘safe’.
-References: All three versions of her. ( Left to right; Current, When I first started playing her, and in her backstory ( 5 years ago. )
Old body-type version, colors remain although.
-A set of throwing knives
-A claymore sword
Owns a lot more weaponry, but it’s already heavy. And that she doesn’t have enough hands.
Alignment: Chaotic Neutral
-Adventurous: Most of the reason why he’s mostly still around is for the sake of tasting adventure and freedom. Although, he tends to get himself with everything due to this. The law, and mostly about everyone that enjoys the feel of justice.
-Careless:Se’s a bit of an idiot, and doesn’t think about things before she actually does certain things. This goes to jumping into battles with people that may be more dangerous then herself - or deciding it would be a good idea to try anything that would put herself into harm’s way.
-Naive: If you’re one of Alyona’s close friends - she’ll end up believing you almost completely. This is something she’d usually try to hide from others - but if you’re one of the girl’s friend’s, he’ll believe you if you have her trust. It’s like being able to stare at someone and know that they’re good enough to follow.
-Daring: She’s moreso to do things that people wont usually do, along with being careless Alyona won’t hesitate to jump into dangerous places for anything that she feels the need to do for either herself or someone she trusts. Especially if there is something that she needs to do to save a friend’s life.
-Loyal: Alyonawon’t usually defect to another side, unless she’s too confused or angered. If one manages to come to her aid, she’ll come to theirs no matter the issue. It’s something she’ll regularly do, and she doesn’t plan on betraying any factions or trusted people that she made friends with, she’ll automatically have some sort of emotional attachment.
-Difficult: When frustrated, she becomes amazingly stoic and refuses to reason with anyone. She becomes very capricious - jumping at a chance to fight or harm anyone who may had been the source of her own anger or guilt. Or, just becoming very hard to talk too.
-Impulsive: At the moment she feels the need to do something; she’ll do it. Alyona doesn’t regularly plan things out unless they’re of value or important to herself. If she does plan something; it’s usually a very bad plan.
-Outgoing: As developed by town-hopping and moreso boredom, she enjoys to have conversations with anyone. Even if they may not like her, or if they’re going to be her meals or after they have been bit. She just pleasures in talking to people in general.
-Childish: She might as well be a thirteen year old kid, because that is what she pretty much is like. She pulls stupid jokes and puns for the sake of doing it, and may act a bit spoiled at times.
-Weaponry: She collects weaponry as a hobby. She’ll take mostly everything, whenever if it’s laying idly about - or in someone’s hands. She would often ask for them, if you drop one during a fight - she’ll automatically take it.
-Pranking: If you count pushing people into the water among other trickery; another of her hobbies is pranking unfortunate people. It may be how she usually pushes people into water or occasionally scaring them to near death. In his opinion, it’s fun. Also, terrible puns.
-Socializing: Alyona does enjoy talking to anyone, it wastes time when she’s bored, and she’s able to know more people. She enjoys having friends with him while sneaking or adventuring into things that shouldn’t be explored, especially those whose too ‘good’ to join him in his schemes - the brunette usually makes fun of them for being in higher levels of the morality rank. Due to this, most of the time she’ll talk to people.
-Winter: She really enjoys the presence of snow, who could blame him? She gets rather hyper at the sight of snow - going into a childish mode that plays in the snow. She’ll build snowforts and snowmen until he’s tired and goes home to do it again the next day.
-Children: They’re fun to play and talk too. Though, ironically he gets along with them well due to the fact that he can just as easily think like them. Though, he’s actually a terrible caretaker - more or less. Though he’ll immediantly protect one if they’re in danger - Do children usually play with silverware?
-Vigilantes: No. Nononono. You do not play the ‘hero’ around her, or else something like that will probably trigger something in her mind - a desire to bring down the person from whatever pedestal they put themselves up on. Although its counterproductive seeing as they’re trying to get rid of the bad guy -- he’ll probably team up with whoever he’s fighting to help them beat whoever it is up.
-Morality: Such things such as guilt or the feel of responicibility bother her constantly, as such how she ends up nearly fearing these things coming into her life, as her childhood of near isolation usually spared herself from meeting any others. Though, as she begins to have more of a social life -- thinking of having to take care of others, feel sorry about things and worrying about things that might not even happen, or delayed for weeks to go. She’s a childish person who doesn’t want to grow up.
-Idiots: People who do not understand regular things are much of a bother to her, as they seem to not be able to do simplistic tasks or even listen. Although she is an idiot herself, anyone with lesser IQ or more careless then herself make her want to cringe. This usually leads to bullying of certain people who seem to be a bit too naive to do something, though there are some exceptions who become her friends after some fun times of poking fun at them in front of others.
-Mages: She has a certain hate for mages, It just really annoys her to see it.Although magic is a usual thing around here; any sort of magic slightly unnerves him. She’s not scared of it, though - it’s more so an annoyance to see people using magic in the streets for no reason, and would love to punch one in the face to interrupt whatever magical things they’re doing. Due to a fight with a fire mage, her dislike for mages increased - leaving only some exceptions to this. Usually because she hadn’t realize their magical abilities yet or is actually really bad with it.
Alyona was born to Etaina and Dorofey on December 22th, a somewhat warm day. It wasn’t the sunniest but the sky cleared up a bit as if to celebrate the birth of a young girl. However, the mother’s life didn’t last long. As she gave birth, she died a few days after from internal pain and disease. However, the young girl was fine.
Her father was quite disappointed as he had wished for a son; although came up as a loving dad to Alyona as he saw her as the last of his wife gave to him. Though, as there was no motherly figure in her life - she didn’t have anyone to ask for in certain female situations. Though, she got used to them on her own - quite hard in her own opinion.
The young girl was brought up more as a son then a daughter - as she learned how to hunt animals at a young age in an attempt to get her interested in the family trade of furs and other merchandise that could be made from animals roaming the northern continent. Alyona quickly learned, and such had been stuck into her head. Among these came other masculine hobbies, as adventures into the dense woods had brought her much joy to adventures.
Later on in life; at the age of eight, she had a new step-mother. A woman by the name of Esfir. Her new mother, however, came from a rich heritage; a family of merchants and scholars. Though the thought of staying inside to study about history and things never seemed to get into her head. As she had been forced to study as much as she could before the woman would really let her do anything else. Though, unknowingly to Alyona - it was mostly out of tough love.
Within the span of two years - it was soon enough that Alyona, and the rest of her not-so-new family - moved into a larger house for them all to stay in. Though Alyona did miss the woods; and the thick, snowy, forests where she could freely splatter red all over the pure, white snow; it was.. Okay, here, too. The large house was comfortable, for one. Though never really make any friends with anyone else in the area; as she didn’t really understand what they were speaking. Soon having to learn the language.
Although, Alyona was commonly lectured about continuing Esfir’s family trade as her heiress. Something of which she doesn’t seem to enjoy much about. Though had easily given her much stress that she deemed uneccessary. Due to how the woman tended to put it on her, as how Alyona’s step-family, all depended on her. How she needed to do her best in everything. Of course, she never did that; but it did stress her to no end at times.
Later on, Alyona’s father - Dorofey, has heard news of a tradegy. As shown that one or two of his former drinking buddies ended up getting severely hurt - one of them dead due to a vampirical attack. With this, the father decided to go back to the small ‘town’ and stay there for a while. For the sake of avenging one of his now deceased friends. Not much had happened during that stay. Except for a quick visit from a stranger.
In Esfir’s sleep, the young woman - Alyona - had heard a knock at the door. Due to the other’s deep sleeping, she wasn’t able to hear it. However, the brunette who was able to turned to it, awoken from a light sleep. Although, due to her father’s absense, she had taken a moment to rush towards the door, believing it to be her missing father. Though, what she found was very disappointing. What stood before the door turned out to be a stranger with red eyes, not taking a moment to lunge her teeth into her - sucking blood out from her throat. Paralyzed by the sudden attack - it took moments before she began to shriek. One of which was muffled by a palm.
In the morning, she was awoken by Esfir, who had found her in the middle of the hallway in front of the door. The door was closed and locked, though some snow had snuck itself inside. The step-mother did have a heart and dragged her soon into bed, sick with worry. The following days were struck with illness - Alyona, bedridden for the next three days. A report was soon given to the house as it turned out that her father has been found dead.
Soon enough, Esfir went to find another doctor. Although wasn’t confident, causing her to leave the house for a long period of time; out of despair of her ‘loss’ of a daughter.
It was also the day that Alyona got ‘Better’.
Her eyes were now a red hue, feeling more impulsive then she was before. She could get out of bed, and run around as though no one was there - as there was no one there.
As any day in the northern continent, the day was snowy with no such sun to be seen, giving the ability to run around in the snow. It wasn’t enough time before she began to feel hungry, she tried to eat food - but her appetite didn’t allow it, as the thought of eating began to sicken her as a thirst in her throat emerged. Where’s a doctor? She began to walk through the stone path covered with snow, feeling more energy then she was able too for the past years growing up. She walked through deep snow through a forest as the sun slowly began to set.
Closer she began to get to any neighboring house she was able to get near, soon beginning to knock upon a door loudly. It took a minute before someone opened it, due to the darkness of the night there - it was hard to catch a sight of her eyes. They let the girl inside, seeing as how she looked innocent, they were unfortunately wrong.
Later on, they had let her rest. That same night a catch of her eyes were seen, the resident soon rushing to a weapon - a knife. A fight began, of which the unfortunate resident soon lost. As blood seeped out of his neck, the thirst rised as a lick at it came. It wasn’t long before she began to suck his blood, due to the injuries - the man was paralyzed. She did it for a minute, possibly more. The man soon died from blood loss, but Alyona was completely fine again.
It felt nice, soon enough, she began to do this to as much neighbors as she was able too. Though, as suspicion built up -- the brunette was soon to be ran out of her home - and the rest of the town .As there was more towns, it felt a bit more nicer there. Soon, she began to develop the ability to have a conversation with her meals, right before biting them. Too her, it was fine. It let her know a bit more about her victims. Such as who they were and what they did, though they didn’t like the girl herself. Though, what they tend to show as problems in their own personal life is disturbing. As shown by how seemingly little things such as guilt or other things in a regular life style gave her many views of suicide, shown through various people.
Soon having to move between towns to escape executions - she stumbled upon the boat to the mainland one dark night. Soon to land herself in Darkovia. Oh boy, this is just her kinda place, ain’t it?
Skills, spells and abilities (if applicable):
-Agility: She’s a very quick fighter, usually having a quick reaction timing and counter-attacks. She’s known for being a rather hasty fighter, mostly using her vampirism for a boost in speed and strength, to the point of being able to literally bounce off a wall as an attack. Counter-attacking is a good ability of hers.
-Daring: She’s willing to do more stupid things then the average person, and so will go through most obstacles if there was something that he needed to achieve or earn. It may be entering a dangerous place or fighting against someone that may be stronger then herself.
-Quick-Learner: Alyona is able to learn things quite easily, from things such as actual lessons to learning how to use a weapon, or literally copying what someone does just by watching. Though, if she’s not interested into a certain subject she won’t learn it as quickly as he usually would.
Medical skills: Due to the fact that she works in a medical house, it’s natural for her to know how to at least know how to bandage someone. Though she has absolutely no knowledge of even enough confidence to proceed something complex like a surgery by herself - he can at least just make himself proud of what she can do.
-Impulsive: She’s not usually one to plan out things regularly. Due to this; she tends to jump into action before thinking anything through. Only when she’s extremely serious about certain actions that she would plan things out - in itself is rather rare to see. ( And his planning skills are really terrible at that. )
-Magical harm: She's mostly defenseless against attacks that come from some sort of other force aside from someone's sword in their harm. For example, some sort of mechanical weaponry, hidden traps within an area - or the most obvious, any kind of magic. Alyona has some experience with magical attacks, though the ones he had fought weren't exactly the best at their own skill. If she were to fight someone he knew had a stronger force of any other ability that she is both aware of and stronger then the previous mages she fought - the first thing on his mind may be to flee.
-Non-Defensive: Alyona isn’t a person to think about blocking attacks on-sight. As mostly she will try to dodge or counter-attack, though if she isn’t able to do either she’s at a bad point. She had never had proper training and so never learned how to properly block a blow from another, and won’t parry a sword unless she put her mind to it.
Not serious at all: It’s rare to see him actually take anything seriously, due to the fact that unless it has something to directly harmful to do with himself - the best he can do it just take it a bit deeper then ‘lightly’, and he can’t get himself to frown even if he wanted too. Painful things are hilarious if you’re not the one suffering.
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