Drakkoniss
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Glad to see that this has finally been started. I'll be very glad to see what happens... Anywho... On to the commentary. I recognise the name Ajax from somewhere... it's annoyingly familiar, yet I cannot put a finger on it, so to speak... I do not quite see any hypocracy in that, but yes... I suppose that might be enough to get him out, if he's that foolish... perhapse a ruse? I doubt it somewhat, but I cannot be certain of the situation... This situation could be quite interesting... Oh my gosh... I think that's Grey Sillhouette and Blue Gear's one and only mission together (annalysis after reading... 7 lines, including the narative first one [ 5 paragraphs, if you would prefer])!!! I orriginally thought that might have been from the point of view of police officers, or special agents of the govornment... Ah, the bowling alley birthday party... brings back memories... not that specific party, but... you know what I mean. Interesting... improved thermal... Detailed enough to distinguish facial features... magnificent. Interesting... More obsession, and 2 years back... I wonder if interest had subsided by the events of the previous story, or if he still was obsessed with the Mastermind before he discovered aparent evidence of Clown in the murdered gang member's home... Nice tastes... I love red... pity he's probably about to die... I wish I had dark red tinted shades... XD To be fair, he might not be heartless. He could very well be a patsy who acts as the face of the real crime lord... Then again, I don't exactly have enough info to comment on that... I only came to Liberty again, earlier this year... Hmm... I'd reccomend a system less loud than a jet pack for flying... it's "roaring to life" very well could have alerted the body guards to your presence... I reccomend gravity manipulation... His fathers hair... hmm... Natural bleached blond... most peculiar... Poor kid... if he lives, he'll probably be traumatized for life, and there's a large chance he'll seek revenge... eventually... He could go to the side of good or evil, and try to fix things, or whatever, and then seek revenge on Grey when he sees him... WOOT!!!! Desert Eagles... woner what caliber... probably .50... Yes, the mistique of Grey was always quite... dark... powerful... I liked that about him; It was added to by his drive to make criminals pay... yes... quite terrific... Reminds me bit of Bruce Lee... Not too muscular as to hinder speed, but strong enough, and flexible enough in combat to get the job done... Batman, as well... More vindictive, though... and obviously more deadly... Nice shot... Must require VERY well tuned senses to hit accurately without looking, and with the aquardness of a bowling ball as a projectile in overhead throwing... Nice coordination taking out the guards in such quick succession... a bit clumsy on the one where you broke his fingers, but you survived... By clumsy, I meant you took too long between the guard before him, and that one... a bit of the second longer, and he'd either have missed normally (somewhat doubtful), hit you, or you'd have had to have dodged it... You still pulled it off, though, so who am I to complain? XP *sigh* If only they had better trained gunman... one that was also a martial artist could be very effective in a fight with you... being able to dodge, or counter, many of your moves, which would give him openings to atempt to shoot you, during it... He should have anticipated you coming after him... perhapse he did, and laid a trap for you... I know this mission is unsuccessful, so that may be the case... It was indicated, however, that Blue Gear was the cause of its failing... It could be a little of both, but then again, there could be no trap... I cannot say... Oh, yes... you also need stealth tech... You espescially should have invested in that for this mission... even with the armor capabilities that you mentioned, stealth tech would still have been very good... I find it strange to say "you" in reference to both Grey Sils... Very strange indeed... The war was going on that far back? Based on what I know, it should have been only started a bit more than half a year ago... maybe it just hadn't atracted atention from the masses who swarmed to it after that time, but this I find very perterbing... Hope it isn't using litteral X-Rays... That good be bad for the health of many people, and your reputation... And mention of an attack on the apartment buildings... I can put that up to coincidence, though... Semiautomatic, yet having machinegun fire... sounds like it's been hacked... they do that in real life (turning semi-automatics into fully automatics), and I like the addition of it in your story, although some people might get confused by the wording of it... Nice armor indeed... I wonder how indestructable it really is... and I am also curious about the composition... I don't think I've seen it in the game's universe, although I have in the C&T continuity, so I'd be able to able to reproduce it in that version of events... Good thing the gun didn't fire upon hitting the ground, and he didn't keep a hold of it... They do misfire quite a bit when dropped... at least often enough... Ah, the clasic dilema... lose your honor, and live a while after you snitch, or be beaten to death by the angry guy in front of you... I thought hardly anyone even knew the Mastermind even existed... no matter, that was from a point in time in the future, and it very well could be accurate then... I like the part where you showed him his victims... priceless... deep pain and hatred, I feel, through your writing. That man is a fool, it seems... adds to the intensity quite a bit... hehe... I think he does want to die... I think he wants Grey to kill him, so the Mastermind won't get vengeance... I bet that would have been an even worse death... Fury... rage... bloodthirst... Wonderful... I still agree with Grey... he should die... Not quite sure the kid seeing him slain was a good idea, as I said before, but he should not have been allowed to live. Justice? I'd say that is justice: Vigilanti justice works better than the lawful way alot of the time. If he was sent to court, he would have gotten off. He just bragged about exactly that. He may be a little Knight Templar for many people's tastes, but he was right in this case, and many others. Society has become to squeemish about death lately. Too many people have gotten prison sentances that deserved to have been executed. It's only in modern times that we've become so complacent in this regard, and it's because of this that the jailbreak of L.O.C.K.D.O.W.N. proved so effective. Death is a just sentense sometimes. It may seem harsh, but it is a necessary sometimes. Aaaand the criminal escapes while you are fighting... either that, or (more unlikely) commits suicide... Yeah... I didn't expect him to stop when you were trying to appologize... Went about as well as I expected... better, in fact... well, better then my initial thoughts on the possibilities indicate were likely, or possible... Yes... a little more restraint could have led him to quite a bit more success in information gathering, if he'd tortured some of his victims, instead of outright killing them, but then again, that could be very dangerous... Yeah... I thought so... I thought he'd devote his life to ending their lives with his hatred... I didn't anticipate him going that far, and wanting to kill all of them, but I knew that could be a possibility... always a chance of that in these scenarios...maybe that's where I remember the name Ajax from... Now he seems a bit of a hypocrite, seeing as he's going to take the law into their own hands... I can understand that, though... I had felt the same once... so long ago...
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