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seltin the champ -> Starlight-Discussion and feedback (8/19/2010 21:46:26)

Starlight

Discuss this short piece of poetry i just thought i would write.

Fixed your link ~superjars




Hallie Slidepath -> RE: Starlight-Discussion and feedback (8/28/2010 9:00:14)

I like it. It's short, but sweet and describes the scene wonderfully.
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Unable to decide if i am right

Just make that i a capital letter and you're good to go ^^

Sometimes when poems have a structure like this, where everything is supposed to rhyme on one single word it can feel a little "forced".
I don't think you get that feeling form this poem though. I think it's great.




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