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Glais -> RE: Mritha's Collection of Written...Stuff (2/15/2012 18:15:36)

Ohhh, so that's why xD Alright then, justified.

And I see, so Violet's not so powerful after all, guess that scene needs reworking then.

And yeah, Lance would've been really predictable, but Zeratie was more predictable in my opinion.

Brother-sister? He kissed her, which isn't something most siblings their age do.



Mortarion -> RE: Mritha's Collection of Written...Stuff (2/15/2012 18:26:31)

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Mritha originally wrotte: @Mort, Slower than I thought when I put this story on hold... but now that I finally found a way around the corner I trapped myself in (months later v.v) I've been able to get back to writing this.


YESSSSSSSSSSSSSSS, I can hardly wait, you are one of the best writters I have ever seen so I can't wait, and remember that you don't need to do everithing alone, you could ask another writter to help you solve the problem



Mritha -> RE: Mritha's Collection of Written...Stuff (2/15/2012 18:32:00)

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guess that scene needs reworking then

Yea, that and many others >_<

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Brother-sister? He kissed her, which isn't something most siblings their age do.

True, though I have seen it done in books, movies, and the like. One person is wallowing in despair, their companion talks them through it and rekindles their hope, sealing it with an affectionate kiss. It can be romantic, sometimes it isn't. I've seen it done both ways. I was mainly angling for the non romantic side, though it isn't really an issue if it is seen otherwise.



Glais -> RE: Mritha's Collection of Written...Stuff (2/15/2012 18:36:43)

Gotcha. Guess it's just a matter of interpretation. Looked to me like it was the "signal" of their romance starting up or something.

Many others need reworking? It only looked like a few select parts to me, but then again I'm only MAYBE halfway through.



Mortarion -> RE: Mritha's Collection of Written...Stuff (2/15/2012 18:40:57)

SO Mritha, got any idea in how much time you'll be able to update your story?



Mritha -> RE: Mritha's Collection of Written...Stuff (2/15/2012 18:47:37)

I didn't end the first war in Falconreach very well, and completely blew through Oaklore, ignoring all but Rolith's key quests before moving on. I dunno, I guess to me it seems like there is so much wrong with it. I'm really looking forward to finishing the rewrite, I'm so excited at how my writing has improved compared to what it was. The L&L classes that Eukara is doing now are helping me quite a bit, as are college papers XD

@Mort, I'm not going to say a specific time, I cannot know. It may be in a few weeks, it may be in a few months.



Glais -> RE: Mritha's Collection of Written...Stuff (2/15/2012 18:52:54)

I see, well lucky for me I'm not that far. And even if it does need to be fixed, you're still a good enough writer that I can learn and enjoy some badly needed reading material.

Also forgot to mention, one thing I like about this is it actually feels DF-ish. A lot of stories don't seem to quite capture it.



Mritha -> RE: Mritha's Collection of Written...Stuff (2/15/2012 19:10:36)

Let me know what you think of it please, you may catch something out of place that I missed before.

And as for your final comment... *hugs him!* That is what I have strived for! Thank you SO much :D



Glais -> RE: Mritha's Collection of Written...Stuff (2/15/2012 19:15:34)

Honestly yours is actually the first I've read that does so :/ It might just be your writing style, but it's really easy to just make this seem DF. In fact, chapter 1's the only one that didn't fit in my opinion.

And will do, I tend to do a by-chapter critique pattern so a lot of things I say now may change down the line as X character might do something different, and so on and so forth.

EDIT:And read chapter 6 7, yeah that was kind of weird. With how you've stressed Violet being the opposite of experienced, they really shouldn't have lasted that long against Sepulchure. And Mark died. There goes "the team."
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"I think there is a pirate town called Osprey Cove near Falconreach."

I'm sure you know, but it's nowhere near FalconReach.
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"Then it's settled. The four of us versus the world!" Zeratie said with a laugh

Oh the irony.



Mritha -> RE: Mritha's Collection of Written...Stuff (2/16/2012 13:00:36)

Thanks for that, all help is greatly appreciated. I do NOT want to rewrite this thing again >_>

As for Osprey Cove, I didn't know that at the time. I also forgot about it this time. *makes a note*



Verethragna -> RE: Mritha's Collection of Written...Stuff (2/16/2012 17:36:48)

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but now that I finally found a way around the corner I trapped myself in (months later v.v) I've been able to get back to writing this.


Wait.
You were having trouble and didn't bother asking me?
>.>



Glais -> RE: Mritha's Collection of Written...Stuff (2/16/2012 18:48:20)

Alright so finished part one. Overall very nice, it actually felt like DF. How she ends up at the...beginning of the game is certainly interesting. I expected her fall to be the end of that. Then you tricked me twice and it did end up being how she got to the cliff, just not immediately.



Mritha -> RE: Mritha's Collection of Written...Stuff (2/17/2012 20:11:25)

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Wait.
You were having trouble and didn't bother asking me?
>.>

You had enough on your plate with the puppy and the Rift. I didn't want to add any more |:



Verethragna -> RE: Mritha's Collection of Written...Stuff (2/20/2012 18:02:51)

Sadly, you're the only one who cares.
Belieeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeve me. >.>



Baron Dante -> RE: Mritha's Collection of Written...Stuff (2/23/2012 14:55:52)

X: Out of curiosity, what kind of an story is a DF story? xD




Glais -> RE: Mritha's Collection of Written...Stuff (2/23/2012 18:14:43)

Hm. Not sure. I guess one that just feels like DF? That's how this story works for me. It just fits so well while staying unique.



Shadow Ravena -> RE: Mritha's Collection of Written...Stuff (2/24/2012 0:17:57)

I think he means a story thats mostly funny, while being serious at the same time. Classic beginning DF. And I will agree, not many stories here are 'DF-y' many are very much darker, like Water Saga/Ravenloss the whole time.



Glais -> RE: Mritha's Collection of Written...Stuff (2/24/2012 0:21:11)

Well it's not just that, but even the serious moments "fit" DF. It just works. I don't know how to explain it but for example, when I read this my mind immediately substitutes DF images. When I read other L&Ls, that isn't always the first style to come to mind.

After some thought, I liked Legacy of a Hero so much I'll begin act 2 even before the revamp...



Mortarion -> RE: Mritha's Collection of Written...Stuff (4/17/2012 16:23:25)

I am jsut here to point that there are still fans of your work that are waiting for your awesome stories



Mritha -> RE: Mritha's Collection of Written...Stuff (4/17/2012 16:30:09)

Thanks, Mort :) I decided to take a quick break from the war and write a little now since I finally have the time to do so.

@glaisaurus, Act 2?



Mortarion -> RE: Mritha's Collection of Written...Stuff (4/17/2012 16:39:38)

Yay, and remember that we'll, or atleast me, keep waiting for your updates :)



Glais -> RE: Mritha's Collection of Written...Stuff (4/17/2012 17:16:37)

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@glaisaurus, Act 2?

Yeah. The part after she gets on the cliff. I only managed to read the first chapter of it though.

Eh, I await everyone's updates anyway, but this is one of my top favorite DF stories. Revamped it'll be amazing.



Mritha -> RE: Mritha's Collection of Written...Stuff (4/18/2012 12:16:14)

Thank you, and thats the plan. I recently learned the bane of my writing while writing a paper for English class. Thanks to my pet peeve of having very long and/or very short sentences, I am constantly making comma splices. Its like an endless circle, every time I come close to fixing one problem with my writing, I discover another. v.v

But technical issues aside, I plan on posting the edited Part 1 as soon as its done, work on a more detailed and longer version of Oaklore, then rewrite what is written of Part 2 and move on from there. I'm going to try to set aside some time each day to write at least a little. I honestly can't believe it has been over a year since I last posted anything, that depressing thought is nagging at me to finish this.



Mortarion -> RE: Mritha's Collection of Written...Stuff (4/19/2012 15:08:24)

Something that I remembered, you said you'd make a MQ history, so, I am afraid to ask, will you make it? And, are you still taking other forumite's characters?



VanHellsin24 -> RE: Mritha's Collection of Written...Stuff (4/19/2012 15:54:48)

OMG I love your poem Death.....

I need that laminated and made into a poster...



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