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D1F3Forum -> (DF) The Nation: The Story of Vae'njaece (7/9/2011 20:47:25)

Please discuss the story "The Nation" here.
The story can be found. Here
All critiques are welcome and if I made any mistakes, it would be helpful to have those pointed out as well.
Thx and enjoy!!!




Mortarion -> RE: (DF) The Nation: The Story of Vae'njaece (7/9/2011 20:51:31)

Jsut make me die in the story already, I only have one condition, make Ra'aret ear his tounge out with his teeth, chocking in his own blood, ironically I always told you to do this, way to close the perfect day




D1F3Forum -> RE: (DF) The Nation: The Story of Vae'njaece (7/9/2011 20:55:09)

If that's what u really want...
I'll see what I can do.
Eating your tongue out??? Ew...[:'(]




Mortarion -> RE: (DF) The Nation: The Story of Vae'njaece (7/9/2011 20:55:54)

No, don't eat the tounge, he bites it so hardly it cuts and falls off and that he fall off a cliff, just in the most slight chance that I may return, I mean what's the point in keeping my character, I am out, unless you want my help?




D1F3Forum -> RE: (DF) The Nation: The Story of Vae'njaece (7/9/2011 20:58:59)

So he BITES his tongue off...then falls off a cliff???
Interesting...Maybe Vae'n will see you and you die somehow in the grand scheme of things...hmm...[8|]

I could use the help...




Mortarion -> RE: (DF) The Nation: The Story of Vae'njaece (7/9/2011 21:00:11)

That's unless you want my help, but who cares, I don't, I am not sad to leave the NAtion *goes to cry in a corner*, also you could make Ra'aret "die" but jsut end horribly deformed and return as a CW terrorist




D1F3Forum -> RE: (DF) The Nation: The Story of Vae'njaece (7/9/2011 21:02:10)

lol...yeah not sad at all...[&:]
Ok...I've gots a proposition for ya...
You help me out with this book for a while and I'll put you back in with a warning...
How's that sound?




Mortarion -> RE: (DF) The Nation: The Story of Vae'njaece (7/9/2011 21:03:48)

That sounds good, sorry that I overreact but this is my only safe heaven, and msot clans do that, I meant normal clans are like "You have one feet in the door" and then it's "you are out". But I'll still be for some time in a depressed way, if you want I can help with villains/ anti-heroes if you want




The_Insomniac_Of_Lore -> RE: (DF) The Nation: The Story of Vae'njaece (7/9/2011 21:06:43)

@Mort do you always use plurl when sigular is required?




Mortarion -> RE: (DF) The Nation: The Story of Vae'njaece (7/9/2011 21:07:16)

I don't know, my mind isn't here too much tbh




D1F3Forum -> RE: (DF) The Nation: The Story of Vae'njaece (7/9/2011 21:07:38)

THe good thing about this clan is that I'm leniant (i don't think I spelled that right...[&:])
Others like the BoH and I'm guessing the Phoenix r pretty strict.
I just want active members who are good with other members.
I can see you're working on it and I'm not into kicking out ppl for stupid things...




Mortarion -> RE: (DF) The Nation: The Story of Vae'njaece (7/9/2011 21:08:38)

Waht the helmet is leniant?




The_Insomniac_Of_Lore -> RE: (DF) The Nation: The Story of Vae'njaece (7/9/2011 21:09:54)

@Mort tbh?




D1F3Forum -> RE: (DF) The Nation: The Story of Vae'njaece (7/9/2011 21:10:37)

It means the opposite of strict, basicly.




Mortarion -> RE: (DF) The Nation: The Story of Vae'njaece (7/9/2011 21:12:15)

Ahhhh and michael tbh=to be honest




The_Insomniac_Of_Lore -> RE: (DF) The Nation: The Story of Vae'njaece (7/9/2011 21:14:23)

@Mort that makes sense.




Mortarion -> RE: (DF) The Nation: The Story of Vae'njaece (7/9/2011 21:19:01)

D1F3Forum: First how can I call you?. Second, if you are going to make characters out of every member, ask them for their bios, and if you kick someone for inactivity and they return, will they rejoin?. And in waht can I help you?




D1F3Forum -> RE: (DF) The Nation: The Story of Vae'njaece (7/9/2011 21:26:40)

1) How can I call you??? What??? Idk what that means...PM me for things relating to the story.

2) Bios will work. Nice idea.

3) If a member is kicked due to inactivity they must prove that they are willing to be active. I send them something I want them to do (War-Get to a certain amount of waves) stuff like that. They can rejoin...if they're willing.

4) Give me ideas and that's about it. I have the plot down I just need space wasters. The 1st chapter is really short and it would be great to put more stuff in there. So ideas.




Mortarion -> RE: (DF) The Nation: The Story of Vae'njaece (7/9/2011 21:34:19)

BY waht to call you I mean a surname

I think that you could make small stories for every chapter and then you tie them down into one big story

I'd make a chapter realting how the nation, as an organisation obiously, came to be.

I'd reccomend you make them one nemesis, and that yo uadd the soulalies factor into the mix


Hope it helps




D1F3Forum -> RE: (DF) The Nation: The Story of Vae'njaece (7/9/2011 21:58:47)

Sry...I was eating dinner...[&:]

I might do something like that in the future...I like the idea...
This story is telling how the Chaos Weaver Nation came to be...in my own way.
Basicly, when I add chapters on, it will be more clear...




bsteiny16 -> RE: (DF) The Nation: The Story of Vae'njaece (7/9/2011 22:05:00)

Not bad, D1F3Forum. So far, very good. Can't wait to see the next part.




Mortarion -> RE: (DF) The Nation: The Story of Vae'njaece (7/9/2011 22:09:04)

And the SA idea?




D1F3Forum -> RE: (DF) The Nation: The Story of Vae'njaece (7/9/2011 22:10:19)

Next part will be interesting...
I have the plot all inside my head, it's just I had to get through the first chapter and I did!!!

Anyway, in the next part, be prepared to meet...

spoiler:

Vaal...dun dun DUN!!!

He's gonna be so cute at age 7...[:)]



@Mort:
I have to do my research (Again) on Chaos Weavers and Soul Weavers...Idk if I'll add Soul Allies, but it will be in the ball park...

Check out Necro Berserk's story, and you'll get a bit of the CW Nation while holding off Vaal...This story is about how the CW Nation formed and why it was needed...




bsteiny16 -> RE: (DF) The Nation: The Story of Vae'njaece (7/9/2011 22:12:01)

Lol. How about put me as a character....you know, as a baby?




Mortarion -> RE: (DF) The Nation: The Story of Vae'njaece (7/9/2011 22:13:28)

And me as an infant-in-warrior-training




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