Legendium -> RE: [AQ/DF] The Coldness of War Discussion (12/4/2012 10:56:14)
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towns people Townspeople. It's one word, not two, unless you add an apostrophe in between town and s. quote:
But, it icy blue. But, it was icy blue. Huh? This Lord Arrgthas character seems to have come out of the blue. quote:
Cryonomicon(eggnoginomicon) Just as a writing style suggestion, I'd leave out the "(eggnoginomicon)". But, your style, you're choice. All in all, I'd say this. It all seems a bit fast for the first chapter. Normally one meets the antagonist in the second or third chapter, or if the first chapter is very long, occasionally in chapter one. I just think we missed a beat in the story. Other than that, the story has potential. There's usually plenty to write about wars, so you should bee able to make a nice long story. I look forward to the next chapter.
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