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5/14/2014 4:15:35   
The White Knight
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Here so you guys can bash me all you want :3, plus I love to see what other people think <3

Here is the story: Night of Knights
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5/14/2014 10:02:52   
UnderSoul
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The setup seems really good, but it's kind of hard to read. I recommend paragraph breaks for dialogue to make it less like a giant menacing block of evil text. The story itself kind of gives off a Black Ops 2 meets Custom Robo feel, which is good.
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5/14/2014 14:21:34   
The White Knight
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I gave up after black ops one, custom robo, I admit I did play, but definitely not going for that feel D:. Thank you Undersoul for the criticism, I'll keep adding we'll see where it goes !

Edit: Also it seems I already made the paragraph indentations... but it won't accept them ._.

< Message edited by The White Knight -- 5/14/2014 14:22:11 >
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